It’s hard to imagine what it is like to be kidnapped. I’ve tried, often, probably every day for the last four years. Imaging the unlimited scenarios, anything from the kidnapper’s first contact to the actual abduction and the subsequent transport, has plagued me for many sleepless nights. It is hard not to focus on the betrayal he must have felt trusting that stranger. The absolute fear and possible pain he felt while maybe getting dragged away into some van or truck. Thinking of how they may have subdued him if he started to fightback. Sadly, the only thing that brings me some measure of comfort is imagining him poking an eye out or busting the son of a bitch’s testicle with a hard kick. I wish that’s where my imagination ends when I dwell on my son’s kidnapping. But it is not. That rabbit hole is deep and filled with things that take days off my life by just the thought of it. Truth is, neither myself nor my now ex-husband know what really happened.
At times I believe I am literally in Hell on Earth. My world has been upside down since my son went missing from my yard. Thinking towards the future is impossible for me now. So my days are cramped up in my home, reliving every detail of the day he went missing. Most disturbing,however, is that the most mundane of things torture the worst; veering through the kitchen window into the backyard I haven’t visited in four years and seeing the sun-drained, abandoned swing set and slide; hearing the theme song for the kid shows he routinely watched; seeing the back of a head on a child, who slightly resembles mine if he were four years older, at the grocery story or park or everywhere. The worst however is the sound of the phone ringing. Every time it sounds, my body gets filled with the most conflicting emotions. Is this the call I find out he is alive or dead? Or worst, that it is neither. Truth be told, a knock on the door is equally as jarring.
Never more so than today as it turned out. When I opened the door, a large man in uniform greeted me with tender eyes and said, “Ma’am, we received a call today. Apparently one of your neighbors allowed their cat to get out of the house.” The two sentences couldn’t have been more crushing, another dagger of lost hope, but this one cut especially deep due to the tease of his blue uniform. As the disappointment drenched me from head to soul, the gentlemen continued to ask me for a favor, “Over the years the ground under the houses in this neighborhood tend to sink quite a bit. Silly cats love nesting down there. Would you mind if we go into your backyard and retrieve the cat from under your house?”
“Ma’am…are you okay?” He obviously knew I wasn’t.
As the blood rushed from my head to my broken heart, I meekly mumbled, “Why didn’t I know that?”
65 Comments on 'A Kidnapping'
Well written, but it is too short and the ending is abrupt. It isn’t scary, or chilling either.
Flash fiction. It’s intended to be short.
It’s not exactly creepy. But, it’s very well written, and darkly disheartening. Four years. So hopeless. I kinda love this one.
The opening drew me into the story.
I enjoyed it, it was a nice simple read.
I can imagine the woman’s devastating look on her face when she realizes her son could’ve gotten stuck under the house. Since she didn’t know about the land
I enjoyed reading this. It was a nice introduction to this site. I had to read it trough a second time before I realized what had happened. Eh, still a good story.
Wait…so he SUNK INTO THE GROUND?? Well that’s enough outdoors for me
I found this website while stubling on stubleupon, it was for the candle cove story, after i read that im hooked! This was a great story. Such a simple idea floods me with total horror. Very good imo
If the Police Officer knew about the ground sinking under the house, then wouldn’t the Officers who were called when her son went missing in the first place have known too? And in and around the house is the first place they check when looking for a missing child, wouldn’t someone have checked under the house?
Oh my fucking god
Omg!! He sunk into the ground???? Oh man NOW I get goosebumps !! Great story!!!!
Wow, did NOT see that one coming.
Read this awhile ago but it’s really enjoyable.
5/5, short but effective. At least with surprising me and then making me feel pretty depressed.
Very nice, very nice, always love the short and creepy ones! ^- ^
I was very well written and a good base, it was a little confusing. Non the less it was good 8/10
not bad…
oh my god, freaky. He sunk into the ground.
Really good story! Maybe wouldve been better if it was a little longer, but wow. I could almost feel the same fear as the mother.
VelveLcrow your picture is adorable! 😉
It was really, really well written but I do wish that it wasn’t a cat that was her son. Everything else was awesome.
Honestly, I kinda want more from this. Its too short and leaves to many questions I would love go see it rewritten maybe elaborated on a bit. Maybe even to the point of finding her son…..has a lot of potential.
no bad
HE….. FELL UNDER THE HOUSE….. OMG… BUT LIKE IMAGINE BEING HIM. IMA BE A WRITER FOR A SECOND; “I’ve been stuck under the house for a long time. I try to kick at the floor and scratch at the dirt to dig out but I can’t. My voice has gone hoarse from screaming so much. The sun sets and everything gets chilly around me. I try to curl my legs up to my chest. I am so cold.”
BUT ISN’T THAT LIKE SCARY AS HELL?!?!?!?
I think it was a good Creepypasta and interesting and not as paranormal, but I gotta see this is one type of creepypasta.
That was so sad. I love the “I meekly mumbled” part because it shows how deflated she was and how sad she was.
i think you could of went on and put more details in the short story………… overall it was pretty good.
OH MY GOSH MY MIND JUST GOT FUCKED IN SOME MANY WAYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED BUT MY MIND JUST GOT FUCKED SIDEWAYS!!!!!!!
Im going to write from the boy’s view:
I had thrown the ball under the house, and I had gone under to retrieve it. As I pulled myself in, I fell. “What’s this hole under here for?” I murmered to myself, bewildered. I looked up, and saw that I was in a deep hole. Fear clenched in my stomach as I tried pulling myself up the wall of the hole. I fell back, shaking my head. I let out a scream of terror, pounding at the dirt walls.
Perhaps I thought I might escape.
Perhaps I thought wrong.
Hours passed by and I became hungry and thirsty. My throut was hoarse from screaming, and my fists ached prom pounding on the dirt wall. Exhausted, I landed one fist on the wall, then crumbled to the ground, passed out.
(That was fun!)
That was cool! But also sad ha imagine what the kid was going through 🙁
NO MORE OUTDOORS ONLY INSIDE
that was so so good – outdoors?!
NEVER AGAIN!!!
if u click my name u can read my 4 pending pastas I’d really like it if somebody could at least give them a try even if they don’t make it onto the list
Omg poor kid!!!! This is so depressing!
Okay bye outdoors I’m staying inside now!
But that’s the thing, if he had been missing for a very long time and was under the house he would be dead, because he would have starved. So that is why none of you should be commenting the boy’s point of view…
Oh my G- *Gags* He would be so smelly by that time the this woman would have it checked?! I mean, come on, girl!
Oh….my….friggen….gawd…….he sunk into the ground….no more backyard for me…0_0
Nice story and perfect twist. Loved it.
Imagine if this really happened and you were a parent. How heartbreaking would that be? You would live with so much regret.
Can you imagine ?
Never going outside
wait what? he sunk into the ground?
Wow just… What the hell.
omg i didn’t expect that
Holy shit, amazing man.
This is just depressing…
*reads pasta* KIIIDS UR STAYING INSIDE TODAY
I already don’t like the outdoors. I know what kind of crazy crap can happen out there. But now this… Never let me go outside ever again. Ever!
Awesome Pasta, Please MAKE MORE!!!
So what just happen was the kid went under the house got smushed?? O-O
Wow… that’s just… Jesus Christ I’m gonna go hug my niece and tell her to never go under the house…
Great pasta!
Imagine if the parents heard the screams and cries of the child at night, and that drove them to believe they were just going crazy with remorse? They begin to have mental issues and breakdowns, which led to the divorce. and one day, the screaming just stops..and later down the road, the mother learns about the base of the house..creepyyy
The child’s story
“Mommy?” said the child. “Where are you?” said the child as he looks around in something that looks kind of like a cave. The child cries,”Mommy! I’m really hungry!” (1 day later)The child writes “NO WAY OUT” on the walls with a rock. A cat falls from above and the child runs up to it. “Come here,kitty.” said the Child as his stomach grumbles. The cat tries to run away, but the child catches it. “I’m sorry kitty,” said the child as he smashes the cat’s head and hits its body repeatedly. The child then began eating the cat’s corpse…(I got too lazy to write more.) P.S Jeez, I really suck at making CPs.
This was just awesome, I don’t care what anybody says. He wasn’t implying the cat was her son lol she just pieces it together that, that’s probably what happened to her son. The best creepy pastas (in my opinion) are the ones that can actually happen and that’s what makes this one so great! I rated this five stars <3
[Reaally??? Under a house][There are usually much cooler places to die]
*gasp* amazing! I loved the twist. I thought she was going to be like his murderer or something but that is much better!
I thought it was more tragic than scary. Broke my black heart.
no more outdoors for me
Awesome twist at the end! You know that feeling when your heart jumps or your stomach lurches with adrenaline, like going down a hill on a roller coaster? That’s how i felt at the end. It was so surprising and chilling. I can feel the devastation that the mother was feeling when she heard the news. 🙂 Loved it! Keep up the good work!
Don’t really need to worry about this happening to me because I never go outside 😀
She’s dumb
Like someone else said, wouldn’t officers have checked there when they filed the missing child report? But, this story was still great. Much better than a lot of try hard creepy stories here. 5/5.
Well Fuuuuuck thatjsjdjdjanznd
This is one of the best creepypastas I have ever read, very well constructed and sent chills down my spine. Very clever with the ending. 10/10
Parents tell you to go outside and play……. Show them this and they will say no more
He long dead nowa’
Wait a minute… -_- The part where it says “who slightly resembles mine if he were four years older, at the GROCERY STORY or park or EVERYWHERE.”
I’m so confused at this part. That can use fixing, but otherwise good pasta. 8/10