“Do you feel safe in your house? Does your house have secure doors and windows? Do you trust your neighbors, if you even have any?”
I ask these questions, but I already know the answers. I know so much about you. I know how you tick, I know how you tock. I know what makes you happy, I know what makes you angry, and I know what makes you afraid. I have been watching you since you were just a young one; my how’ve you grown.
You used to be afraid, when you were just a little one. You hated going to sleep unless you’re nightlight was on. No matter, I will just hide in the shadows that you’re bright wall casts. I am quiet. I am still. Oops, was that creek on the wall a bit loud, just blame it on the house settling or mice and fall asleep. You got older, started to believe less and less in me. You always had a scientific answer for the creeks and the warps; they were the pipes and the air conditioning. That’s perfectly okay with me. I don’t gain or lose power due to you believing in me.
Your fears were still so easy to exploit. I know how much you hate spiders; here is a nightmare about them. I know that test tomorrow is stressing you out as well, here’s a dream about that too.
You must think that you are so strong, that you can take on the world. Your parents say that the world is your oyster and that you have all that it takes to be whatever you want. All I see is just another sack of meat that fears the unknown. I know because I am the unknown.
You may find yourself to have a night in which you are reminded of my ultimate and my infinite power; the power that you will never fully understand, the power that you will never reach. You will find yourself waking up from horrifying nightmares of my own creation and you will look around your room. I will still be watching, staring at you, waiting to finally meet you.
You may fall asleep again, I creep closer, bringing the darkness and the shadow closer with me. I will start at your feet.
You wake up again and I crouch underneath the bed. You may feel that the room has gotten darker and more enclosed, don’t mind that, just go back to sleep.
As you fall to sleep again, I resume by going underneath the blankets that you call to protect you. The protection that you normally feel from wrapping yourself in those sheets will soon become your everlasting prison.
I creep closer and closer as you start to toss and turn from yet another nightmare that I have manufactured from the years of my research. However, I have made sure that you will not wake up, not quite yet.
I slither all the way to the edge of the blankets. I also intensify that unpleasant dream that you are experiencing as you wake up once more. I really must say that I find so much pleasure in intensifying nightmares.
Once more, you look around the room, noticing that it is much darker. I can see you, I am just a foot or so from your face. You may never see me, but my pearly white eyes see you.
You start to drift off to sleep once more as I breathe out a bit. You notice right away as your body starts to shake and you start to sweat. You slowly pull the covers until you start to make out my true features.
You immediately notice my slightly troubled mouth. I know, I tried to clean up a bit before my grand entrance, but a few stitches that hold my mouth together may have fought loose a bit as I creeped up to you. You start to scream as I breathe out the last thing that you will ever hear. The sound has been described as being the middle of a major windstorm, in the middle of an open space.
I make sure that you fall asleep right after, however, sometimes you might just faint. That saves me time. I creep back into my domain in the shadows to watch you as you sleep once more.
I am the shadows that dance across your room at night. I am the banging pipes and the spider in your dreams. I am the wind that feels a bit to close for comfort. I am the ultimate fear for you will always hear my cry as long as you live on this dump that you call home. I am the tormentor of those who refuse to abide by my rule. I am The Ombra!
41 Comments on 'Bedtime Stalker'
I lost interest so bad when I read you’re insted of your…
I admit, I couldn’t relate to the character ‘unknown’ was talking about. I’ve never owned a nightlight. I never had pipes in my room walls or air conditioning. I actually like spiders. I’m currently not in school. My parents never mentioned to me about the world being my oyster. No kind of human figure could ‘crouch’ under a futon. I don’t generally have nightmares about spiders and pipes. I was, though, a paranoid kid.
I’m going to nitpick here, so I apologise if i’m frustrating. ^^;
Mice don’t make walls creak.
“I ask these questions, but I already know the answers.” Or then why ask the questions? He talks about saving time, yet he spends so much unnecessary time waiting for a moment to meet me, when he had many opportunities to do so.
There are a few typos, or words that would’ve been much better replaced; In the last paragraph, ‘spider’ should be ‘spiders’, ‘to’ should be ‘too’, ‘in’ instead of ‘on’. ‘rule’ should be ‘rules’, or though I don’t actually remember him talking about any rules. Yeah, there’s kind of a lot to mention.
But keep going, you’ll get better if you keep writing.
This is awesome
This really want very good. It was descriptive, but not well put together. It also lacked a true sense of horror. 2/5
Tehe but what you don’t know is that is is accually I who watches you what you see is yet a decoy. I have lots of time to spare what you don’t know is that there is creeper things out there. I am but a shadow in the night a breeze blowing through your window. Your not even shoure I exist as I feed on your wants for power! You do not scare me I terrify YOU!!!!!!!!!!!! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!
Reminds me of the song, “When You’re Evil.”
how’ve you? should’ve been how you’ve, smart one
not bad, not bad at all
although your grammar leaves something to be desired I must say that the overall story was very well written, please keep making more stories
I read this to my friend who is afraid of the dark and she freaked out when I got to the blanket part
i had Johnny Ringo by Crown The Empire on, and the clown music intro was creepy as hell when i first started reading
I thought it was creepy, but I agree with not connecting with the person, other than that very descriptive.
Funny Lol But Not Creepy uonuf for me lol better make it scary like as thingy touched ur back and u looked back but no one was there or like u feel asleep and woke up in a mettle of nowhere lol ok? :3 Hope you liked my comment lol
um. That person in the shadows….. Yeah it’s Jeff. Don’t worry though I won’t let him get you. I only let himwatch. You’re welcome. ~Jane the Killer.
I’ve always like the idea of putting the unknown into one entity. Very creative when it was first done. This story could use some work. The idea is good but overused. Try to put your own spin on it. I don’t like the fact that you used the reader as the person in the story. That rarely works. I would make it my own by adding specific fears and a named character. That would really improve this story. I really love some of these lines so good job on that. All in all this was fairly good. Have a pleasant day.
This feels more like a masturbation fantasy than a creepypasta. I’ve seen scarier and more confident literature posted on tumblr by guys attempting to cast a wide net to convince everyone they’re a big alpha “daddy dom”.
“Oo yeah, I’m so powerful, I’m the most powerful thing ever, I’m so damn omniscient, and now I’m in your bed baby girl, ooo yeah I’m coming under your covers, big scary daddy is here…”
I thought the title was very good which made me HAVE to click on the story best title I seen so far and the story was brilliant!
Its really good but one thing, ombra isn’t scary i just laughef at that
Good job creepy as all hell Good job
The last paragraph reminds me of “This is Halloween” from the Nightmare Before Christmas movie. A few grammatical errors here and there, but overall, this is a great story. Keep at it!
It was okay not scary not boring just alright
it was alright not bad not good just alright
This is a sick story yo
I must say, the first 3/4 of this story does extremely well in setting an oppressing atmosphere, but ultimately fails to support it. This story would have been better received if not for the anti-climatic ending. The victim of this story was simply haunted by nightmares, maybe a bit of bodily harm or “soul stealing ” escapades would have held the fear.
NEVER. SLEEPING. AGAIN. LEAVING ALL MY LIGHTS ON. DROPPING MY BED TO THE FLOOR AND KEEPING MY CLOSET OPEN. PUT LIGHTS IN THERE TOO. I loved this story! great horror, and I loved the first person point of view. 10/10
Mmm… These omnipresent monolithic entity stories are pretty hit and miss, the author has to be careful with the writing. I think this one could have been much better. 2.5/5.
good creepy bro
OK, I looked up ” Ombra ” and got ” smart bra’s “. I get it, my bra is scaring me now.
Great.. Can’t sleep now
fun and exciting an overall great pasta
Hello there, just to provide some shameless self-advertising; I’ve done a narration of this for my channel:
I know this one was written a while ago & plenty of other people have done their own video for it, but better late than never, right?
hello I’m relatively none of you know me as far as I’m aware and hello I’m outcast I’ll not disturbe any of you insted i’ll just watch from my own litle shadow here
For some reason I now want to meet The Ombra… Ik I’m weird and proud of it 😛
Anyways sometimes I like facing the unknown it’s fun
Wow, you got beat up by a big kid at school right before you wrote this, huh? This is some dweeb power fantasy horseshit right here. The frequent spelling mistakes (it looks like autocomplete was wrecking your shit, dude) and generally poor writing technique are almost as annoying as the fact that this reads like the lyrics to a cheesy Scandinavian black metal song.
good story , good read. a creature that feeds on fear makes me think of ghostfreak from ben ten man how i miss that alien 🙂 also it did make me think of creature feature .
not too bad
Makes kids more scared of the dark, or more understanding of it.
Again, great Pasta
Very good story! As others have pointed out, there are some grammatical errors here and there. Other than that, excellent story that I relate to!
Scare-A-Holic I can’t believe it I was listening to that song as I read your comment
Pretty nice 😛