Dancing Shadows

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I look into the night,
And I know I’m in a trance,
As my head turns to the right,
I see the shadows dance.

The voices keep on saying,
Do it, do it, die,
I feel my skull expanding,
At least I have to try.

I can’t take all the screaming,
On the balcony I kneel,
I feel like I am dreaming,
But no dream is this real

I jump towards my death,
I watch the ground get closer,
As my bones rip through my flesh,
I know my life is over…

Now you’ve read my story,
Look out the corner of your eye,
I’m screaming at you hoarsely,
Do it, Do it, DIE!

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  • Commented on July 9, 2013 at 8:47 pm

    I thought it was a creative take on creepypasta- you rarely see poems.

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  • Commented on September 4, 2013 at 4:51 pm

    Excellent creepy poem!

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  • Commented on November 17, 2014 at 5:49 pm

    that one was really really amazing

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  • Commented on November 17, 2014 at 7:56 pm

    Definitely a Creepypasta! It’s bone-chilling.

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  • Commented on May 30, 2014 at 9:43 pm

    First creepy pasta poem i’ve seen. Not bad!

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  • Commented on December 5, 2014 at 2:37 pm

    Now Do it, Do it, Die! is stuck in my head good job

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  • Commented on July 12, 2013 at 10:59 pm

    I think this was pretty good, in Creepypasta terms. I made a poem and it sucked.
    Part of my poem didn’t even rhyme, and so I think it was just a bad Creepypasta.
    This one is good, though. 7/10

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  • Commented on August 13, 2013 at 1:59 am

    Nice Poem Dude its really creative

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  • Commented on March 14, 2015 at 1:31 am

    Love it 😀

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  • Commented on October 15, 2013 at 3:15 pm

    Creative, I’ll give you that. I just don’t get that scared from poems. 🙁

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  • Commented on March 25, 2014 at 9:08 pm

    Nice. Loved the last part.

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  • Commented on January 5, 2015 at 4:04 am

    The only thing I hate about this is I already see shadows out of the corner of my eyes thanks to the 2 cats/3 chihuahuas darting around my house. Now every time I do, I’ll freak. Other than that, loved it!!!!!!!

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  • amethyst
    Commented on February 6, 2015 at 7:43 am

    Yeah wow. That was incredible …. its definitely going to be stuck in my head for a while xD

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  • Commented on February 23, 2015 at 3:29 am

    Inthought that was awesome. I would totally count that as a creepypasta!!! I love it. When I read the last stanza, it sent chills down my spine! I wish more stories/poems/creepypastas did that

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  • Commented on July 7, 2015 at 10:12 am

    Wow, that was excellent

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  • Commented on July 19, 2015 at 8:33 pm

    I’ve seen poempastas before, but this is the first one that legitimately sent chills down my spine.

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  • Commented on September 24, 2015 at 8:53 am

    Poems are not really for me, but I did like this one.

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  • Commented on November 20, 2015 at 6:19 pm

    THIS WAS………………………………..AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • um hi
    Commented on January 27, 2016 at 2:41 pm

    I looked in the corner of my eye, and there was a fat kid eating a candy.

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  • Commented on May 3, 2016 at 10:25 pm

    Normally people who try to write poem pastas end up failing, but this is amazing. Not too scary, though.

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  • Commented on May 27, 2016 at 6:26 pm

    Same.

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  • Commented on November 18, 2016 at 7:20 pm

    Your poem sent a chill up my spine, I loved it.

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  • Commented on March 29, 2014 at 1:07 am

    Newbie here, please do not attack.
    I cringe when I realized it was poetry. Not that I dslike poetry, just that most writer’s create…BAD poetry.

    It’s a bit clever, and ends before it gets irritating. Nice quick, “Get in, get out” approach. Simplistic, but I believe that’s what makes this one work.

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  • Commented on September 25, 2015 at 4:48 pm

    Wow a poem! I salute you.

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  • Commented on September 26, 2015 at 3:26 pm

    I love a good poem.

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  • Commented on October 15, 2015 at 7:11 pm

    …is it sad that i actually looked out the corner of my eye. haha.

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  • Commented on October 21, 2015 at 5:10 pm

    Nice

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  • Commented on March 28, 2016 at 3:45 am

    Awesome!!!!

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  • Commented on April 7, 2016 at 11:45 am

    This is great, short and sad

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  • Commented on May 10, 2016 at 12:55 am

    This one just made me sad. 🙁 didn’t really scare me that much cuz I’m used to hearing voices now, but the voices don’t tell me to commit suicide.

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  • Commented on December 29, 2016 at 8:08 am

    Nice take on poetry.. A creepy one indeed. Just do it!

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  • Commented on January 8, 2017 at 7:54 pm

    People who say they don’t understand this poem, they really don’t know the emotion of poems or writing that goes into short poems like this. For me, this poem was powerful and sad, as well as the creepy-factor you need for a creepy pasta. Great work! Please write more

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  • Commented on January 23, 2017 at 3:26 am

    Wow, that was the first poem I’ve seen on here, I feel like it was quite descriptive. 10\10!

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  • Commented on January 24, 2017 at 10:18 pm

    I like that it is a poem.

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  • Commented on February 16, 2017 at 6:01 pm

    This wasn’t the creepiest, but it’s nice to see a poem occasionally.

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  • Commented on March 12, 2017 at 2:55 am

    Love this story and chillingly poetic style. I hope to see more of your works in the future!

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  • Commented on April 1, 2017 at 5:55 am

    Very creepy! It gave me flashbacks of this time I hallucinated while looking out my window (Not fun times but I love this poem anyways)

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  • Commented on March 13, 2015 at 2:37 pm

    Wasn’t scary, but I loved the poem. It’s really rare to see, 5/5.

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  • Commented on April 13, 2015 at 12:24 pm

    i’m shocked to see this. you’ve got potental!

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  • Commented on April 20, 2015 at 8:58 pm

    Creative but vague if not boring.

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  • Commented on May 7, 2015 at 3:33 pm

    LOVED IT

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  • Commented on July 9, 2015 at 2:58 pm

    i love poems! this one really piqued my interest though! ^^

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  • Commented on July 21, 2015 at 4:57 am

    DEW IT

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  • Pinetree's Revenge
    Commented on October 28, 2015 at 1:09 am

    This didn’t scare me. Though, that’s not saying much because i’m not scared easily. Very good, sir! 10/10 breads to you! You had me sitting here like, JUST DO IT! Which in my terms means it was good!

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  • Commented on March 10, 2015 at 3:00 pm

    I like it, a nice quick creepy read. I read all kinds of Creepypastas In my study hall. I’m a freshmen in high school.

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  • Commented on February 6, 2015 at 1:10 pm

    wow, it’s really RARE to see poems approved, by the way it’s really good poem, not good pasta thou。

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  • Commented on July 9, 2013 at 10:55 am

    I can’t decide if this is a creepypasta or not. Opinions?

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  • Commented on August 11, 2014 at 6:18 pm

    I can’t say that this pasta was good or creative because it was to short and didn’t make any sense at all but this is my opinion

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