I look into the night,
And I know I’m in a trance,
As my head turns to the right,
I see the shadows dance.
The voices keep on saying,
Do it, do it, die,
I feel my skull expanding,
At least I have to try.
I can’t take all the screaming,
On the balcony I kneel,
I feel like I am dreaming,
But no dream is this real
I jump towards my death,
I watch the ground get closer,
As my bones rip through my flesh,
I know my life is over…
Now you’ve read my story,
Look out the corner of your eye,
I’m screaming at you hoarsely,
Do it, Do it, DIE!
55 Comments on 'Dancing Shadows'
I can’t decide if this is a creepypasta or not. Opinions?
I thought it was a creative take on creepypasta- you rarely see poems.
I think this was pretty good, in Creepypasta terms. I made a poem and it sucked.
Part of my poem didn’t even rhyme, and so I think it was just a bad Creepypasta.
This one is good, though. 7/10
Nice Poem Dude its really creative
Excellent creepy poem!
Creative, I’ll give you that. I just don’t get that scared from poems. 🙁
Nice. Loved the last part.
Newbie here, please do not attack.
I cringe when I realized it was poetry. Not that I dslike poetry, just that most writer’s create…BAD poetry.
It’s a bit clever, and ends before it gets irritating. Nice quick, “Get in, get out” approach. Simplistic, but I believe that’s what makes this one work.
First creepy pasta poem i’ve seen. Not bad!
I can’t say that this pasta was good or creative because it was to short and didn’t make any sense at all but this is my opinion
that one was really really amazing
Definitely a Creepypasta! It’s bone-chilling.
Now Do it, Do it, Die! is stuck in my head good job
The only thing I hate about this is I already see shadows out of the corner of my eyes thanks to the 2 cats/3 chihuahuas darting around my house. Now every time I do, I’ll freak. Other than that, loved it!!!!!!!
Yeah wow. That was incredible …. its definitely going to be stuck in my head for a while xD
wow, it’s really RARE to see poems approved, by the way it’s really good poem, not good pasta thou。
Inthought that was awesome. I would totally count that as a creepypasta!!! I love it. When I read the last stanza, it sent chills down my spine! I wish more stories/poems/creepypastas did that
I like it, a nice quick creepy read. I read all kinds of Creepypastas In my study hall. I’m a freshmen in high school.
Wasn’t scary, but I loved the poem. It’s really rare to see, 5/5.
Love it 😀
i’m shocked to see this. you’ve got potental!
Creative but vague if not boring.
Wow, that was excellent
i love poems! this one really piqued my interest though! ^^
I’ve seen poempastas before, but this is the first one that legitimately sent chills down my spine.
Poems are not really for me, but I did like this one.
Wow a poem! I salute you.
I love a good poem.
…is it sad that i actually looked out the corner of my eye. haha.
This didn’t scare me. Though, that’s not saying much because i’m not scared easily. Very good, sir! 10/10 breads to you! You had me sitting here like, JUST DO IT! Which in my terms means it was good!
I looked in the corner of my eye, and there was a fat kid eating a candy.
This is great, short and sad
Normally people who try to write poem pastas end up failing, but this is amazing. Not too scary, though.
This one just made me sad. 🙁 didn’t really scare me that much cuz I’m used to hearing voices now, but the voices don’t tell me to commit suicide.
Your poem sent a chill up my spine, I loved it.
Nice take on poetry.. A creepy one indeed. Just do it!
People who say they don’t understand this poem, they really don’t know the emotion of poems or writing that goes into short poems like this. For me, this poem was powerful and sad, as well as the creepy-factor you need for a creepy pasta. Great work! Please write more
Wow, that was the first poem I’ve seen on here, I feel like it was quite descriptive. 10\10!
I like that it is a poem.
This wasn’t the creepiest, but it’s nice to see a poem occasionally.
Love this story and chillingly poetic style. I hope to see more of your works in the future!
Very creepy! It gave me flashbacks of this time I hallucinated while looking out my window (Not fun times but I love this poem anyways)
Sounds like a song I heard once.
do it. do it. DIE
I already hear voices…
One of the stronger ones tells me I’m pathetic, useless, and a lot of other stuff Lilongwe those lines
i loved it
do it do it die
Nice Chorus “Do it, do it, DIE”
One to be remembered
Nice to see a creepy pasta in poem form
Can someone die, please, because I’ve been screaming this poem on my balcony for the last hour and nobody from the other apartments have commited suicide yet.
Just listening to the muffin song by Tomska while reading the last line, anyone else?