Dancing Shadows

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I look into the night,
And I know I’m in a trance,
As my head turns to the right,
I see the shadows dance.

The voices keep on saying,
Do it, do it, die,
I feel my skull expanding,
At least I have to try.

I can’t take all the screaming,
On the balcony I kneel,
I feel like I am dreaming,
But no dream is this real

I jump towards my death,
I watch the ground get closer,
As my bones rip through my flesh,
I know my life is over…

Now you’ve read my story,
Look out the corner of your eye,
I’m screaming at you hoarsely,
Do it, Do it, DIE!

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  • Commented on July 9, 2013 at 8:47 pm

    I thought it was a creative take on creepypasta- you rarely see poems.

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  • Commented on September 4, 2013 at 4:51 pm

    Excellent creepy poem!

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  • Commented on November 17, 2014 at 5:49 pm

    that one was really really amazing

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  • Commented on November 17, 2014 at 7:56 pm

    Definitely a Creepypasta! It’s bone-chilling.

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  • Commented on May 30, 2014 at 9:43 pm

    First creepy pasta poem i’ve seen. Not bad!

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  • Commented on December 5, 2014 at 2:37 pm

    Now Do it, Do it, Die! is stuck in my head good job

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  • Commented on July 12, 2013 at 10:59 pm

    I think this was pretty good, in Creepypasta terms. I made a poem and it sucked.
    Part of my poem didn’t even rhyme, and so I think it was just a bad Creepypasta.
    This one is good, though. 7/10

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  • Commented on August 13, 2013 at 1:59 am

    Nice Poem Dude its really creative

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  • Commented on March 14, 2015 at 1:31 am

    Love it 😀

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  • Commented on October 15, 2013 at 3:15 pm

    Creative, I’ll give you that. I just don’t get that scared from poems. 🙁

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  • amethyst
    Commented on February 6, 2015 at 7:43 am

    Yeah wow. That was incredible …. its definitely going to be stuck in my head for a while xD

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  • Commented on March 25, 2014 at 9:08 pm

    Nice. Loved the last part.

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  • Commented on January 5, 2015 at 4:04 am

    The only thing I hate about this is I already see shadows out of the corner of my eyes thanks to the 2 cats/3 chihuahuas darting around my house. Now every time I do, I’ll freak. Other than that, loved it!!!!!!!

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  • Commented on February 23, 2015 at 3:29 am

    Inthought that was awesome. I would totally count that as a creepypasta!!! I love it. When I read the last stanza, it sent chills down my spine! I wish more stories/poems/creepypastas did that

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  • Commented on July 7, 2015 at 10:12 am

    Wow, that was excellent

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  • Commented on July 19, 2015 at 8:33 pm

    I’ve seen poempastas before, but this is the first one that legitimately sent chills down my spine.

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  • Commented on September 24, 2015 at 8:53 am

    Poems are not really for me, but I did like this one.

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  • Commented on November 20, 2015 at 6:19 pm

    THIS WAS………………………………..AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • um hi
    Commented on January 27, 2016 at 2:41 pm

    I looked in the corner of my eye, and there was a fat kid eating a candy.

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  • Commented on May 3, 2016 at 10:25 pm

    Normally people who try to write poem pastas end up failing, but this is amazing. Not too scary, though.

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  • Commented on May 27, 2016 at 6:26 pm

    Same.

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  • Commented on November 18, 2016 at 7:20 pm

    Your poem sent a chill up my spine, I loved it.

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  • Commented on March 29, 2014 at 1:07 am

    Newbie here, please do not attack.
    I cringe when I realized it was poetry. Not that I dslike poetry, just that most writer’s create…BAD poetry.

    It’s a bit clever, and ends before it gets irritating. Nice quick, “Get in, get out” approach. Simplistic, but I believe that’s what makes this one work.

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  • Commented on September 26, 2015 at 3:26 pm

    I love a good poem.

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  • Commented on October 15, 2015 at 7:11 pm

    …is it sad that i actually looked out the corner of my eye. haha.

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  • Commented on October 21, 2015 at 5:10 pm

    Nice

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  • Commented on March 28, 2016 at 3:45 am

    Awesome!!!!

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  • Commented on April 7, 2016 at 11:45 am

    This is great, short and sad

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  • Commented on March 13, 2015 at 2:37 pm

    Wasn’t scary, but I loved the poem. It’s really rare to see, 5/5.

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  • Commented on April 13, 2015 at 12:24 pm

    i’m shocked to see this. you’ve got potental!

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  • Commented on April 20, 2015 at 8:58 pm

    Creative but vague if not boring.

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  • Commented on May 7, 2015 at 3:33 pm

    LOVED IT

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  • Commented on July 9, 2015 at 2:58 pm

    i love poems! this one really piqued my interest though! ^^

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  • Commented on July 21, 2015 at 4:57 am

    DEW IT

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  • Commented on September 25, 2015 at 4:48 pm

    Wow a poem! I salute you.

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  • Commented on May 10, 2016 at 12:55 am

    This one just made me sad. 🙁 didn’t really scare me that much cuz I’m used to hearing voices now, but the voices don’t tell me to commit suicide.

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  • Pinetree's Revenge
    Commented on October 28, 2015 at 1:09 am

    This didn’t scare me. Though, that’s not saying much because i’m not scared easily. Very good, sir! 10/10 breads to you! You had me sitting here like, JUST DO IT! Which in my terms means it was good!

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  • Commented on July 9, 2013 at 10:55 am

    I can’t decide if this is a creepypasta or not. Opinions?

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  • Commented on February 6, 2015 at 1:10 pm

    wow, it’s really RARE to see poems approved, by the way it’s really good poem, not good pasta thou。

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  • Commented on March 10, 2015 at 3:00 pm

    I like it, a nice quick creepy read. I read all kinds of Creepypastas In my study hall. I’m a freshmen in high school.

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  • Commented on August 11, 2014 at 6:18 pm

    I can’t say that this pasta was good or creative because it was to short and didn’t make any sense at all but this is my opinion

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