It’s Christmas time, and my mom wanted to start a new tradition. Of course she had to make it “Elf on a Shelf”. I wasn’t too enthusiastic about the idea, but she knew that I wouldn’t go for just a hidden elf. So my mom made it a murdering elf. Why the fuck not, right? It’s already creepy enough looking already. But that’s not it. She put post-it notes on the elf and they were clues to find the “victims” of the elf. She knew I was horrible at finding things, so this was for her amusement. I was completely against it. I hated the idea, but she insisted that I do it. Well, insisting turned into forcing. I’m happy now though… This elf is my best friend. You probably think I’m crazy right now, right? Just… just hear me out. I… I am holding my mother’s heart, and her lifeless body lying at my feet. I was ecstatic. No more mother, and someone, or someTHING that felt the same about her. I hope we have the same takes on people; There are a lot of people I don’t like at school.
Elf on a Shelf
30 Comments on 'Elf on a Shelf'
I’ve seen the Elf on a Shelf thing at work and it is pretty creepy. This pasta though, is not. I’m not sure if you intended it to be that way but it is. It made me giggle at the end but that was about it. I feel like it could have been creepier if it was just drawn on a little bit.
I didn’t really enjoy this pasta too much because of how short it is. It could have been a good pasta if it had more depth to it, like explain why or how his mom died. altogether it wasn’t that good but if you try again you can make a really good creepypasta. 2/5
Not that good could go a little more into how she died
How does crap like this get approved?
U know what makes this creepyer an elf on a shelf is watching me right now *take machete and slices its head off*
wow… that was stupid
This is not good, it lacks of a lot of stuff and it escalated very quickly not even gonna bother saying what it lacks off。
It makes no sense, its a bunch of mishmosh jammed together with gore thrown in randomly. Why has this been approved but none of my stories have been? Mine are complete, etc.! This is not.
This is a good pasta it shows a mentally unstable child killing their mother because of an elf which he gave a personality to told him not the best pasta but good 3/5
Lol wow, just wow. I liked it. 5/5.
I laughed so much until i got to that ending. Really???
Mine are COMPLETE and pretty damn good, but they are waiting for approval or denial.
This was a shame, i was expecting a little more depth
to much going on, shelf the elf
That is pretty screwed up!
Grow up, kid, being told to clean your room is not a good reason to write murder fantasies about your mom.
Of course! Why not make a Pasta based off the Christmas doll that scares the crap out of everyone?! And I think there was something wrong with the mom. A MURDERING elf? That is just creepy and wrong! The main purpose of Elf on the Shelf is to basically scare kids into being good. So it’s kind of ironic that the mom makes the elf a psycho killer. Just, oh my lanta!
This pasta had potential, but the ending was horrendous…
the creepy spider thought this pasta was bland and tasteless
its nice with the whole elf on the shelf thing but it could use a few more details
This is creepy knowing that I have an elf plushy.
Despite all the negative comments I think it’s good concidering it supposed to be a short story I think u could just go a little more detailed on how the mom died or on the actual elf
My mom made her elf on the shelf evil by saying that if I opened my presents early it would kill me…. Yea we have weird traditions. Anyone heard of the christmas pickle?
yayyy murderous children… just yay
“do you not like my elf? why that’s no trouble. I could care less” the man said lifting the elf off the table”the only problem is the elf doesn’t like you ether. why is this a problem? well… lets just say he get carried away in his pranks and punishments. and im sorry it had to be this way.”
Gee kid cool down
All i want to say is that i HATE elf on a shelf’s. there just so creepy, my mom bought one once and it disappeared and we ended up finding it underneath my little brothers crib. it sends shivers down my spine thinking about it….
I dont mean to be offensive by saying this because you might be a new writer and i dont want to crush your hopes but i felt this pasta wasnt creepy. I feel like we the readers should have gotten more involved in the story. You had a great start but the ending was super corny. I think that might have ruined the whole thing for me but good job and better luck with you next pasta.
Felt more like comedy was the goal, which is not a bad thing. However, it does warrant either more comedic value, or less depending on which way you are attempting to spin the story.