My son and I often play games, he’s five years old so our games can range from pirate battles in the middle of the ocean to simple board games like snakes and ladders.
Today we decided to play hide and seek.
I counted to fifty while he went to hide in one of the three hiding places that he always picks.
‘Ready or not, here I come’ I called, as I slowly made my way to the sofa. I looked down and there he was two little feet sticking out from behind the sofa, accompanied by muffled laughter.
Oh, I can’t find you anywhere!’ I explaimed, knowing that the idea that he’d hiden well would cause him to jump out of his hiding place in excitement.
‘Right’ I said ‘time for bed’
As I tucked my son into bed and kissed him good night, a small figure appeared at the bedroom door.
‘Mummy,’ It whispered ‘you didn’t come to find me.’
44 Comments on 'Hide and Seek'
I liked this.
Simple but effective.
Well written, and surprisingly creepy
Short and sweet. Loved it 🙂
I don’t get it. :/
Gave me the creeps, oh goodness. I love stories like these!
i love these kind of stories, great job!
Creepy but cute… 😀
Creepy but cute… 😀
Huh, great story! I alway’s loved hide-and-seek……Simple, creepy, and cute….5/5
so was the son in bed and a random kid/host at the door? or the other way around?
So basically what this story is saying is that she tucked in the wrong child?
wow loved it i just wish it was a little longer but still it was a great story 🙂
This was good nice and simple and it was creepy.
Hide & Seek! Quite Brilliant!
arghh!!!! I wonder who the real son is! lol good-read (:
@Dauntless575 , I completely agree with you. Creepy, but cute
there is a stalker behind the sofa
bum bum bum!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
creepy. but who was the kid in the bed…
this pasta was awesome…i love pastas like these…make more!!!
AMAZING! I obviously loved it. <3
Great pasta! I loved it! 5/5
great. i love it
cute. scared me a bit. but very cute i loved it.
ohmygod one of the best loved it 😀
i like this pasta. thumbs up!
Then i remembered i have twins.
Surprisingly creepy. short and to the point. leaves room to wonder.
Short, simple, but very well written… I love it
This creepy and cute at the same time.
omg what a cute mom ;-; How sad they’re both gonna die anyway
This wasn’t really that good cause the boy shou’lve been the one behind the door
That’s what I thought byum it is pretty stupid how its like that
This is very confusing :-\
could have been fleshed out a little more, with a more tangible sense of timing. Great premise though, keep it up!
Aww, I want to cry. :,( I love it; I love pasta’s that are tiny but it’s all in there. 10/10
Very creepy indeed
lacking important transitional elements, and crucial details pertaining to the time and why they were suddenly from play mode to bed mode but it’s got a solid foundation in the main idea:
-play hide and seek with kid
-tuck kid in later
-kid comes back like what the fuck mom you didn’t find me as the parent tucks in some kind of interdimensional shapeshifting kidbeast
And then she found 5 dollars
i loved the story it defo gave the creepy factor you need, i would advise to slowly transition to the bedtime rather than it suddenly cut off. For example say something like, “Later that night i’m tucking my son into bed when suddenly…” etc. Keep up the good work! 🙂
I like the story but was confused why did the kid ask about the mother. Did the mother leave the child. But besides that the story was short but sweet or creepy and sad.haha lol pls keep writing.
I like the ones that make you think.
Amazingly cute but creepy, good job! Wish it was more complex though, but the simplicity does a lot for the story.
What I like about this is the fact that you (the reader) don’t know which one is the imposter
really good. I enjoyed it very much.