Hide and Seek

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My son and I often play games, he’s five years old so our games can range from pirate battles in the middle of the ocean to simple board games like snakes and ladders.

Today we decided to play hide and seek.

I counted to fifty while he went to hide in one of the three hiding places that he always picks.

‘Ready or not, here I come’ I called, as I slowly made my way to the sofa. I looked down and there he was two little feet sticking out from behind the sofa, accompanied by muffled laughter.

Oh, I can’t find you anywhere!’ I explaimed, knowing that the idea that he’d hiden well would cause him to jump out of his hiding place in excitement.
‘Right’ I said ‘time for bed’

As I tucked my son into bed and kissed him good night, a small figure appeared at the bedroom door.
‘Mummy,’ It whispered ‘you didn’t come to find me.’

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  • Commented on October 31, 2013 at 6:20 pm

    I liked this.
    Simple but effective.

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  • Commented on October 31, 2013 at 9:11 pm

    Well written, and surprisingly creepy

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  • Commented on November 1, 2013 at 10:03 am

    Short and sweet. Loved it 🙂

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  • Commented on November 7, 2013 at 1:43 pm

    ……..
    I don’t get it. :/

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  • Commented on November 16, 2013 at 9:09 pm

    Gave me the creeps, oh goodness. I love stories like these!

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  • Commented on January 4, 2014 at 4:12 am

    i love these kind of stories, great job!

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  • Commented on January 17, 2014 at 6:05 am

    Creepy but cute… 😀

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  • Commented on January 17, 2014 at 6:05 am

    Creepy but cute… 😀

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  • Commented on March 27, 2014 at 2:41 am

    Huh, great story! I alway’s loved hide-and-seek……Simple, creepy, and cute….5/5

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  • Commented on May 30, 2014 at 9:47 pm

    so was the son in bed and a random kid/host at the door? or the other way around?

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  • Commented on June 27, 2014 at 11:30 am

    So basically what this story is saying is that she tucked in the wrong child?

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  • Commented on June 30, 2014 at 5:47 am

    wow loved it i just wish it was a little longer but still it was a great story 🙂

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  • Commented on August 19, 2014 at 10:18 pm

    This was good nice and simple and it was creepy.

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  • Commented on August 26, 2014 at 4:19 am

    Hide & Seek! Quite Brilliant!

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  • Commented on October 30, 2014 at 9:38 am

    arghh!!!! I wonder who the real son is! lol good-read (:

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  • Commented on January 5, 2015 at 4:08 am

    @Dauntless575 , I completely agree with you. Creepy, but cute

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  • Commented on January 13, 2015 at 1:21 pm

    there is a stalker behind the sofa
    bum bum bum!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • Commented on January 26, 2015 at 6:18 pm

    creepy. but who was the kid in the bed…

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  • Commented on May 19, 2015 at 6:56 pm

    this pasta was awesome…i love pastas like these…make more!!!

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  • Commented on June 5, 2015 at 1:01 am

    AMAZING! I obviously loved it. <3

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  • Commented on June 16, 2015 at 10:28 pm

    Great pasta! I loved it! 5/5

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  • Commented on July 2, 2015 at 7:00 pm

    great. i love it

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  • Commented on July 8, 2015 at 7:26 pm

    cute. scared me a bit. but very cute i loved it.

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  • Commented on August 4, 2015 at 4:56 am

    ohmygod one of the best loved it 😀

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  • Commented on September 3, 2015 at 1:25 pm

    i like this pasta. thumbs up!

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  • Commented on November 24, 2015 at 12:13 pm

    Then i remembered i have twins.

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  • Q-tip
    Commented on December 17, 2015 at 8:31 pm

    Surprisingly creepy. short and to the point. leaves room to wonder.

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  • Commented on January 6, 2016 at 5:48 am

    Short, simple, but very well written… I love it

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  • Commented on March 5, 2016 at 12:52 am

    This creepy and cute at the same time.

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  • Commented on April 8, 2016 at 11:09 am

    omg what a cute mom ;-; How sad they’re both gonna die anyway

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  • Byum
    Commented on April 18, 2016 at 2:16 pm

    This wasn’t really that good cause the boy shou’lve been the one behind the door

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  • mrboombastic
    Commented on April 18, 2016 at 2:17 pm

    That’s what I thought byum it is pretty stupid how its like that

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  • Commented on May 5, 2016 at 1:13 pm

    This is very confusing :-\

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  • Commented on May 5, 2016 at 5:03 pm

    could have been fleshed out a little more, with a more tangible sense of timing. Great premise though, keep it up!

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  • Commented on May 11, 2016 at 5:55 am

    Aww, I want to cry. :,( I love it; I love pasta’s that are tiny but it’s all in there. 10/10

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  • Commented on July 17, 2016 at 4:16 pm

    Very creepy indeed

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  • fauntine
    Commented on August 2, 2016 at 5:18 am

    lacking important transitional elements, and crucial details pertaining to the time and why they were suddenly from play mode to bed mode but it’s got a solid foundation in the main idea:
    -play hide and seek with kid
    -find kid
    -tuck kid in later
    -kid comes back like what the fuck mom you didn’t find me as the parent tucks in some kind of interdimensional shapeshifting kidbeast

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  • Commented on September 16, 2016 at 5:46 am

    And then she found 5 dollars

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  • Commented on January 8, 2017 at 9:37 pm

    i loved the story it defo gave the creepy factor you need, i would advise to slowly transition to the bedtime rather than it suddenly cut off. For example say something like, “Later that night i’m tucking my son into bed when suddenly…” etc. Keep up the good work! 🙂

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  • Commented on January 17, 2017 at 2:14 pm

    I like the story but was confused why did the kid ask about the mother. Did the mother leave the child. But besides that the story was short but sweet or creepy and sad.haha lol pls keep writing.

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  • Commented on May 18, 2017 at 2:45 pm

    I like the ones that make you think.

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  • Lisa Argon
    Commented on June 28, 2017 at 6:02 pm

    Amazingly cute but creepy, good job! Wish it was more complex though, but the simplicity does a lot for the story.

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  • Commented on July 2, 2017 at 1:30 am

    What I like about this is the fact that you (the reader) don’t know which one is the imposter

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  • Commented on July 13, 2017 at 11:28 pm

    really good. I enjoyed it very much.

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