One Shot

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“I remember when you were just a little girl. Your mother and I tried our best to give you a home where you couldn’t be hurt, since we lived in a bit of a… shady part of town. When you were just a toddler, you would always follow me around the house with that cute little smile of yours, showing me that you still loved me, even after what I had done to the family. Maybe you didn’t know that I divorced your mother and took custody of you because of your undeveloped brain. No, a child naturally loves his or her mother more… Right?

Anyways, remember that time at Jack’s 10th birthday party when you accidentally tripped and fell face first into the large cake? You were so embarrassed and you felt so sorry, but everyone was laughing. Not at you, but with you. I washed your face off, but then you started crying. You asked me why you were such a mess up. I told you that you were just nine and still making some mistakes, but mistakes help make you a good person. You countered my question almost instantly with another question. ‘How does falling into a cake make me a better person?’ We both snickered and moved on, but… You asking me why you thought you were a mess up surprised me. But I let it go.

Do you remember visiting your uncle for the first time? And seeing your slightly older cousins? You were so shy in front of them, it was actually adorable. They saw you by a tree in the front yard and tried to get you to play, but you just hid behind it. It looked like you were about to cry. I’ll tell ya, it took ages for you to break out of your shell and play with them, but it was worth it. You formed a bond with your cousins that no one could else could ever break. I guess… That’s the thing about you? The way your personality is built… You’re shy and lonely, so when you get a friend, you naturally form a strong bond with him or her. Hey, you formed a strong bond with me, too, even though I was just your father. With the ways I acted and talked, it felt like I was just a stranger. Yet, you know when someone says, ‘A man changes when he becomes a father’? I realized when you were born that I couldn’t hurt you.

But that makes this even more difficult,” The man clenches the handle of his already loaded .44 magnum. He stands on the other end of a closed door, left hand on the knob, and ready to bust in. “I can’t say that you’re not my daughter anymore. I know you are somewhere deep inside that monstrous shell.”

The man’s eyes begin to drip salty liquid as he clenches the doorknob. “I need to end your suffering, sweetie… Just one shot to the head and it’ll be over. It’ll be quick…” Soft grunts and snarls come from the other end of the door, where the man stands. “I love you, sweetie.” He quickly twists the knob and throws the door open, seeing his bloodied and disfigured daughter on the bed, eating a rotten corpse.

It only took one shot.

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  • Xena~
    Commented on March 8, 2015 at 4:34 pm

    Eek! I love it. Its really sad but I LOVE it!

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  • Commented on March 12, 2015 at 5:18 am

    Wow!! This is really awesome! You have it longer though. Then it would make it more clear. But i love it!

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  • Frederick
    Commented on May 31, 2015 at 1:22 pm

    This reminded me of Eminem… ” You only get one shot do not miss your chance to blow…”

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  • Commented on April 6, 2015 at 7:02 pm

    This was a pretty good write. I got a good kick out of it. Although the ending could use a little more description, the plot twist there was outstanding. The sweet and adorable memories really helped in making that ending really crazy! 8/10

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  • Commented on June 10, 2015 at 11:23 am

    I think the memories could’ve been a bit more childish, innocent and cute. Just so the story would have a bigger impact when the scene changes. But overall I liked it, very sweet! (8/10)

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  • Commented on September 19, 2015 at 2:38 pm

    Brutal yet emotional, lovely mix of fatherly love and fear. Great short.

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  • GILLY25
    Commented on March 5, 2015 at 7:24 pm

    It’s good, but really sad 🙁 I get at what u where getting at though.

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  • Commented on March 20, 2015 at 12:32 am

    I like the twist it has a nice build up to it also

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  • Commented on November 26, 2016 at 7:32 pm

    Mind if I post this on Ifunny? I’ll credit you.

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  • Commented on March 16, 2015 at 11:22 am

    Really well written. Nice story. Has a Doctor Whoish feeling to it. 😀
    Also apologies to AshKnight for accidentally reporting your comment. I clicked the ! button out of curiosity. Sorry dear :s c:

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  • Commented on March 18, 2015 at 5:53 pm

    It is very good. However, a little more length and more descriptive words would do well. And One or two more sweet memories, just don’t go overboard and drag on. What I really like, is the title. One great thing about creepypasta is its shock value, and I feel as though many would unintentionally click on it assuming it is romance, only to find a very sad story, and bawl their eyes out. This has a very “Zombie Apocalypse” feel too, which will attract Walking dead fans. 🙂

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  • Commented on April 20, 2015 at 4:56 pm

    Well written but common.

    The first part for me is too long, although it is for relatability, some parts are totally unnecessary.

    The last part is concise.

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  • Commented on April 26, 2015 at 11:26 pm

    amazing.

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  • Commented on May 28, 2015 at 4:23 pm

    good story. wasn’t really surprised by the ending though. 4/5

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  • Commented on June 1, 2015 at 4:23 pm

    How lovely, Just lovely

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  • Commented on April 28, 2016 at 11:47 am

    I loved this, it was well written.

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  • Commented on July 23, 2016 at 11:06 am

    That was a very unexpected ending….

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  • Commented on April 10, 2015 at 3:42 pm

    Sweet

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  • Commented on April 19, 2015 at 2:15 pm

    Its OK, but a look title cliché. Father/Mother killing their child? Always like that.

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  • Commented on May 6, 2015 at 6:28 pm

    Good job i LOVED it!!!

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  • Commented on June 10, 2015 at 3:14 am

    The idea of the story makes my heart break, for it’s an all to real scenario (given that the world had fallen into an apocalyptic state). While short, this proved to be a very good read. Good job! 4.5/5

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  • Commented on June 18, 2015 at 1:14 am

    One shot for the daughter. One shot for me. I wouldn’t be able to live with myself after that.

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  • Commented on September 30, 2015 at 5:29 pm

    his is really great, sad yet i love it.
    good work

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  • Commented on October 4, 2015 at 7:36 pm

    It’s good, but a little more description would be nice. The twist… it was sad but could have used a little something extra. Nice job though.

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  • Commented on October 27, 2015 at 6:46 pm

    4/5
    Nice work!
    But I don’t like “salty liquid”

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  • Commented on November 11, 2015 at 11:24 pm

    i am speechless

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  • Commented on April 14, 2015 at 5:54 pm

    This could have been way better but for someones first pasta its ok

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  • Commented on November 4, 2015 at 12:31 pm

    I feel like i saw this situation on Walking Dead or some other T.V show when i was flipping through channels. Never gets old though, 4.3/5.

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  • Commented on March 20, 2015 at 4:46 am

    Good 3/5 claps

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  • asd
    Commented on March 26, 2015 at 1:38 pm

    “I remember when you were just a little girl. It was 1854 and the king just invaded the northpole, to take over satans’s toy factory!”
    Yea yea…. time for your medicine Gramps…

    20th pasta in a row, where the (almost) first sentence is SO BAD, that i instantly stop reading… this site is REALLY worthless…

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