Quiet Room


I’ve always loved the movies. As a film fan, my attention would instantly snap to the TV when I caught a commercial for an upcoming movie. Most of the mindless, overproduced garbage Hollywood churns out is pretty forgettable, so whenever I discovered an indie film with a relatively fresh concept, I was excited to see something different.

Recently, I caught a commercial for an upcoming limited release thriller called “Quiet Room”, which I found pretty intriguing. The story features a serial killer with a twisted sense of morality, who picks his victims based on what he feels they add or detract from society and his killing methods reflect how they’ve hurt others around them. I’ve only seen two different TV spots for this movie; both were pretty similar with just slightly different narration and video.

However, one night while watching SportsCenter I saw a new TV spot for “Quiet Room” that I’d never seen before and I found it to be absolutely chilling. It opened with the title in white text on a black background, which it displayed for about five seconds. That led to second screen of similar text, which simply said “I’m coming” centered on the screen. The text was accompanied by the sound of several people quietly sobbing. Upon looking closer, I could make out about six dark silhouettes of people in the background. There were no film clips in this spot, nor was there a ‘coming soon to theaters’ message. I found this to be pretty unsettling, but probably a viral marketing tactic, so I watched some cartoons to settle my mind so I could get to sleep.

The next day I ran into my friend Jeff and we decided to have lunch together. Our conversation eventually led to this bizarre and creepy commercial I saw during SportsCenter. I was shocked to hear that Jeff had also been watching SportsCenter last night, but didn’t see the same commercial. Instead, he saw one of the original TV spots. I protested and described it in detail, but he had no clue what I was talking about. Naturally, this left me a little rattled regarding what I saw, but a few days elapsed and I found myself settling back into my normal routine, which included my daily SportsCenter fix.

The disturbing commercial had nearly escaped my mind, before I saw it again. It seemed the same as before, however everything seemed to be intensified. The wailing was louder and the dark figures were easily recognizable this time. After collecting my thoughts for a few moments, I quickly called Jeff to ask if he had seen it this time, but again he replied no and hung up, probably thinking this is just a prank.

My mind started to lose focus and I began to doubt what I saw and heard. I went to the kitchen and made myself a snack, watched some more cartoons in the living room to help ease my mind (which didn’t really help this time) and decided it was time to try to get some sleep. I made my way to my bedroom and I was strangely able to find sleep quite easily.

In the middle of the night I woke from my sleep. I swore I could hear something odd, but couldn’t make it out. The unsettling thoughts of “Quiet Room” came rushing back into my brain, instantly putting me on edge. I settled down and tried pinpoint this noise, thinking it was all in my head. It seemed to be the sound of intense wailing, exactly as I had heard it through the TV.

Intense panic set in as I pulled the blanket over my head in an attempt to muffle the noise, but it only grew louder. The sadness of these beings saturated my mind. As I tried to block out these horrible voices, I noticed a shadow pass across my blanket, but I was too afraid to pull back the sheets to see if it was just a bird flying by my window or something sinister lurking inside my room. Suddenly, I felt something cold touch my toes from beneath the blanket and I curled up into the fetal position in my bed, trembling with fear. A few moments pass before the blanket is ripped out of my grasp and I can see what has entered my room. The image of a thick black figure stood at the side of my bed. There were no ears, nose or eyes on it’s head; a wide, grinning mouth was it’s only defining feature. The urge to scream filled my mind, but nothing escaped my mouth. The creature seemed to soak up the terror I’ve become saturated with before it cocks it’s head gently to the side and thrusts a sharp, piercing claw into my chest.

I managed to catch one last glimpse of the creature standing over me as if utterly satisfied before everything went silent and black.

I woke up lying on the floor. I didn’t know how much time had passed, but it was still obviously pitch black outside. I grasped my chest where I was attacked by the creature and found no wound and no blood. Normally, I would give a sigh of relief since I realized it was simply a nightmare and I fell out of bed, but all I could feel was dread and intense sadness; the type of heartache you feel the moment you discover a loved one has died. I picked myself up and stumbled to the light switch, but I couldn’t find it. The only light coming in was the window. As I examined it, it was far larger than normal and looked otherwise abnormal. As I approached it, I could see words written on it in reverse. It said “gnimoc m’I”.

Terror filled my mind as I realized what had happened. As my eyes adjusted to the dark, I turned around to see six dark figures circled around me, crying intensely. The sense of sadness I initially felt increased exponentially and I too began to cry uncontrollably.

The light from the window was the only comfort in this horrible place, so I made my way towards the window so I could look out. The only thing I could see was my friend Jeff, sitting on his couch, watching us.

Original Author: Blipcs

52 Comments on 'Quiet Room'

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  • Commented on July 18, 2013 at 10:08 pm


  • Commented on December 13, 2013 at 7:53 pm


    Other than that, I am at a loss for words. FABULOUS job.

  • Commented on July 24, 2014 at 2:02 am

    That was awesome

  • Commented on November 8, 2014 at 1:26 am

    That was amazing i really had a sense of dread and sadness

  • Commented on November 11, 2014 at 2:16 pm


  • Darren
    Commented on November 21, 2014 at 1:10 pm

    That was really good. HUGE props to you!
    The ending was remarkable.
    Actually could feel the sadness he felt.
    The back up evidence couldn’t be better.
    The intensifying commercials was an eerie touch.
    Not really any!

  • Commented on December 6, 2014 at 9:51 am

    I dint understand the gibberish at the end but then I put 2 to 2 and realized it was im coming backwards cuz Jeff was watching ’em. Amazing work.

  • Commented on December 10, 2014 at 9:13 pm

    uh WOAH.
    I wasn’t expecting that kind of ending.
    The mood was on POINT and I’m so happy I read it.
    Amazing job.

  • Commented on December 19, 2014 at 2:37 am

    Holy, that was amazing. You really blew my mind at the end.

  • Commented on December 19, 2014 at 6:45 am

    That was nice. I’m just curious if the killing method reflecting how the victims have hurt others applied to what happened to the narrator and, if it did, why he died that way.
    Although, again, the story is still nice as it is.

  • tim32732
    Commented on December 22, 2014 at 11:37 pm

    creepy……. it took me like 5 minutes to realize that gnimoc m’i was i’m coming backwards… Rating 10 out of 5

  • CreepypastaReader#666
    Commented on December 28, 2014 at 6:41 pm

    It took people a while to figure out “gnimoc m’I” and that they were in the commercial? Im 11 and I figured it out in like 15 secs 😛

  • jeff
    Commented on February 4, 2015 at 7:17 pm

    same CreepypastaReader#666

  • Commented on February 6, 2015 at 5:24 pm

    That was amazing i read alot of stories like this and if i hadn’t read the comments i would have never had figured out what was written on the window XD

  • Commented on March 19, 2015 at 5:13 pm

    Amazing.. I can’t describe how I felt while reading this. Love it!

  • Commented on May 11, 2015 at 4:21 pm

    Nice love it

  • Commented on May 14, 2015 at 3:43 pm

    11 out of 10

  • Commented on May 22, 2015 at 3:38 pm


  • Commented on July 26, 2015 at 3:17 pm

    Great story. One of the best I’ve seen on CP

  • Commented on August 14, 2015 at 4:41 pm

    That was fucking amazing! Had me on the edge of my seat at the end

  • Rogue-Like
    Commented on August 26, 2015 at 10:54 am

    You all clearly don’t have experience with good material, if this cookie-cutter tripe is impressive.

  • Commented on September 4, 2015 at 6:50 pm

    very nice

  • Commented on September 20, 2015 at 4:40 am

    Dud3. Surpr1s3 3nd1ng!!!!!!!!!!!

  • rory
    Commented on October 1, 2015 at 1:53 am

    omg never will watch the sports channel in fear of the commercial

  • Commented on October 2, 2015 at 8:15 am

    Probably my favorite pasta EVER!! Amazing job!!!!

  • FoxySlayer
    Commented on October 8, 2015 at 3:51 pm

    Amazing job, that ending tho. ps. thanks for making me scraed of watching tv now.

  • Commented on October 15, 2015 at 6:54 pm

    This has to be one of the best stories I have read on here. The ending got me. Great job.. not a lot of these pastas can freak me out like this one did.

  • Commented on October 16, 2015 at 1:07 pm

    Couldn’t really decipher if the main character is a guy or a girl but nevermind.

  • Commented on October 28, 2015 at 4:08 pm

    Great! Would’ve liked a little more gore.

  • Commented on January 7, 2016 at 6:13 pm

    READ IT. 23-9-12-19-15-14, AND 19-13-9-20-8, FIND OUT WHAT THIS MEANS.

  • The_One_Potatoe
    Commented on January 13, 2016 at 6:52 pm


  • Commented on January 27, 2016 at 4:13 am

    God damn that was good especially just reading creepypasta

  • Commented on January 27, 2016 at 1:58 pm

    Loved it never watching sports again tho

  • Commented on February 23, 2016 at 6:29 am

    Intense.. had me feeling chills as soon as the SportsCenter TV Spot was described.. ugh! Tasty damn pasta, son!

  • Commented on February 27, 2016 at 12:39 am

    Absolutely love that ending. Awesome!

  • Commented on March 8, 2016 at 5:06 pm

    Same CreepypastaReader#666 and Jeff

  • Commented on March 8, 2016 at 5:08 pm

    Rogue-Like you clearly don’t have a lot of friends because if you said that about this, you would probably say something like that to a friends story

  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 1:16 pm

    Well, I certainly didn’t see that one coming. That sent chills up my spine. Kudos to you on this!!

  • Sienna
    Commented on April 26, 2016 at 12:40 am

    DAMN that was pretty impressive AWESOME!!!

  • Ciaran
    Commented on May 19, 2016 at 11:28 am

    The ending had me spooked. I was shaking a tad, too, I won’t lie.

  • Commented on May 22, 2016 at 9:08 pm

    doog I esoppus, did ti neppah ni laer?

  • Commented on August 10, 2016 at 5:41 pm

    This story is unsettling and so good like…dude or whatever, I am literally begging you to expand on this story. Like, I know it’s amazing and just so haunting as a short but, imagine what you could do with an expansion.

  • Commented on October 12, 2016 at 3:14 pm

    Jeff the killer?

  • Commented on February 15, 2017 at 8:25 pm

    dude nice ending, love the twist at the end, grate work

  • Commented on April 12, 2017 at 3:54 pm


  • cjblack
    Commented on April 21, 2017 at 7:16 am

    ha! I can’t tell if thish is a prank shtory or not?! Who am I looking for in the window sir?

  • Commented on May 1, 2017 at 4:17 am

    shit….. just……. fuck…..

  • Commented on September 17, 2017 at 7:17 pm

    very creepy! 15/10!

  • Commented on November 2, 2017 at 9:25 pm

    As far as story tags go, this story should have been tagged in the ‘Mindfuck’ category, because that’s what it is. A meta mindfuck the likes of which I have until now seen only in Philip K. Dick or, if you want to be generous, Stephen King. The writing wasn’t the best, there were a couple of sudden and really distracting tense changes, but it was clear you tried, so I give you kudos for the effort. The monster is really, really original, as is its gimmick. And the ending…God it was great! It subverted my expectations in a really satisfying way, and while the dread was lacking all throughtout the story, the final linemade me scream ‘yes’! Maybe it’s not the best pasta out there, but I really, really liked it!

  • Commented on November 18, 2017 at 6:04 pm

    Will the guy stay in the TV forever ?

  • Commented on January 11, 2018 at 9:28 pm


  • Hayli Anderson
    Commented on March 12, 2018 at 4:10 pm

    Wow! Nice twist there at the end! I did NOT see that coming!

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