Its been eight minutes since I sent my message. Seen, but no reply. Something must have happened. Maybe he’s hurt? It’s not unlikely that he tripped and hit his head. His apartment is a mess after all. Maybe he’s simply ignoring me? No, of course not. He’s not like that.
I grab the keys to my car which I conveniently placed next to my computer, and head out the door. I slice through the night air in my 96′ Corolla and wait impatiently at traffic lights as I rush through the suburbia. Maybe he’s simply not home? Out with his friends? Saw the message, but ignored it? No. Maybe he wants me to want him? Oh, I want him… I flick my blinker and make the corner into his street.
I pull into his driveway and jump out of my car, slamming the door after me in haste. I hurry into the building, a greasy old flat. One would think it has been long since abandoned by the looks of it, but I know better.
I go inside and run up the stairs. What if something really happened to him? No.. I must not think like that. But what if? I need to hurry. I’m panting by the time I reach the fourth floor, but now is not the time to rest. I hastily make my way to the unlocked door of his apartment and go inside. A laptop sits alone on a desk. I place my keys next to the laptop and sit down. Seen but no reply. Maybe he’s hurt.
I grab the keys to my car that lay next to my laptop and head out the door.
There is nothing scary or paranormal of this story, but in the slightest degree, it is creepy. I give it a 2 out of 5. No catastrophe or anything happened, just a paranoid person that was concerned for someone.
This is such a great pasta don’t know why people are confused by it 6/10
I dont get why a lot of people are dissing this pasta, its a little difficult to grasp, but when you do get it, its really powerful, great job man
?!?!?!?
And at the end you were just annoying af and he dint wanna be freinds whit you..(jk)
Wow.Really fucked my brain.I laughed hard after realizing what it was. 😀
WTF
I reread the ending three times as it confused me in a great way. I love storied that mess with your brain a little. Short but very well written, keep up the good work!
Um….WHAT!?
Wait if he/she texts him and he didn’t reply and he/she goes to his apartment then the person should find a text he wrote instead of saying ‘seen but no reply’
Nice portrait of insanity. Please do part 2, maybe some backstory. 5/5
[spoiler]so there’s just one person in this story as he said he grabbed his keys next to his laptop…[/spoiler] i had to reread it alot of times as it confused me!
waiting for bae to reply
maybe put stories like this in a separate section … where are the scary ones??
I loved it. Got confused at the end but then after looking at it over and over for a minute I got it. Great Pasta!
This just goes to show, you don’t need extensive gore or descriptive creatures to make a good story.
And your point is..? -_- I see what you were tryna get at and all but really..? That’s how you try to convey it..?
This was different, I like it. Good work
The last sentence should say, “After eight minutes, I grabed the keys to my car that lay next to my laptop and head out the door.
The last sentence should say, “After eight minutes, I grab the keys to my car that lay next to my laptop and head out the door.