Shock Factor

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Appropriate. It says this in the rules, under the FAQ, word for word. Submissions are supposed to be creepy stories to spread around the internet for a bit of an adrenaline rush on those late nights alone. They’re not real, they’re not meant to be full of explicit gore or violence, they’ve always been simple stories – sometimes overdone, sometimes with plenty of cliches or plot-holes, but never… never truly chilling to the bone, not before that night…

As most of you probably know, creepypasta.org receives plenty of submissions. I had started reading over submissions, deciding to help out after becoming a member. It was much harder than I had expected, to be honest, most of the submissions I turned down didn’t cross my mind even once after they had been rejected. Most violators followed a similar pattern: blatant crappypastas, grammatical errors far too frequent to ignore, rewrites of previous pastas that had been done time and time again.

Now, I’m quite the horror fanatic. I love movies, game, stories, anything with a macabre theme that would send chills down the spine. Unfortunately, being such a frequenter of these sites and sources resulted in a sort of… immunity? to the “creepy”. Reading through submissions never really made me glance over my shoulder or peer into dark crevices, not like it used to anyway. I got cocky, thought that nothing could scare me, that I was invincible to the supposed creep-factor.

I was stupid.

It was late. My roommate was exhausted after studying for some class so she had turned in for the night. My cat had been fed and was lounging in the other room, probably dozing off for the moment; Millie only ever got up to run around after I had gone to bed, finding that the most inconvenient time for me must’ve been the most fun for her. With no homework on my agenda and no work the next day, I tried to filter through as many of the submissions as I could, hoping for something new and exciting. Eventually, I got through rather quickly, rating each one and moving on.

“Shock Factor” was next on my list, a submission from a user named submissionfiller. I wouldn’t be contacting whoever this was, this seemed like a one-time thing. Regardless, I started reading through, almost bored at first as they seemed to go with the cliche setting of being alone on a dark, stormy night. Nothing stood out, at least not at first, but I kept reading.

“Maybe they’d surprise me,” I thought. God, I wish they hadn’t.

As I kept reading, the story warped into some… twisted torture flick. Apparently the protagonist wasn’t completely alone, he had someone tied down in the other room. The narration quickly slipped into a step-by-step account of a horrific dissection, without any anesthesia, on some complete stranger. The part that sent a shiver up my spine was the descriptiveness, it seemed so detailed, so involved. It was like nothing that I had ever read before, blunt and all too natural.

I rejected it, of course. It violated the rules, the username looked fake, I simply discarded it with the others and moved on. It stuck, of course, it had disturbed me a great deal, but I brushed this off as just being a good narrative; if that submission had fallen within the rules, it might have made a good addition.

A couple days went by, and at first I had forgotten all about “Shock Factor”. Eventually I decided to look through submissions again. And again, I went through the stories and rejected whatever didn’t follow the FAQ – honestly, you’d think that some of these people hadn’t even given the link a quick gloss-over.

And it showed up again.

“Shock Factor Part 2.” Did this person honestly expect a “Part 2” to be submitted when his first had been rejected? I felt kind of pissed off, thinking that this person had just re-submitted their works, and even a little bit nervous as I remembered just how graphic the last one had been. Regardless, I opened the submission and started to skim through. I was disgusted as I found that the narrator was up to his old tricks, this time with a younger victim, stated as being somewhere around fifteen years old.

I didn’t bother reading through the whole thing as it somehow managed to disturb me more than the last one, detailed accounts of torture and abuse far beyond what I ever wanted to read in my life. All the while, it had that extremely real feel to it, that tone that dragged me in and made me believe that this was some actual legitimate account for a brief moment rather than some sicko’s idea of a joke. A joke, a sick joke to play on the staff for rejecting his first story, that’s what this must have been.

It was discarded, and I didn’t volunteer to help anymore after that. For a short while I thought that it was over, and went back to my normal everyday life. Classes, work, boyfriend, classes, work, boyfriend, classes… I began to slip back into my schedule, though memories of the “Shock Factor” series kept bubbling up over the next week or so.

I assured myself that it was over, until I received an email titled “Shock Factor Part 3” to my personal address.

It was impossible! There was no way that this guy could’ve gotten my personal email! I was unnerved, to say the least, by the fact that he found me. I tried to think of ever possible logical explanation, even getting upset as I considered that my roommate had planned some elaborate prank to disprove my boasting over never being creeped out. After sending her an annoyed text, I received a new one, this time titled “Shock Factor Part 3: You should read it this time.”

My blood ran cold. How the–

I looked at the description nervously, the glimpse of a message any gmail user would be familiar with seeing, located next to the message title. “This time there’s a cat, and I know you love c…” it read, trailing off.

I exited the tab and closed my computer. On some sort of… God-awful suspicion, I suddenly stood up and began searching the apartment for Millie. I called for her, looked under the furniture, I even asked my roommate about her and for nowhere. I started to panic, convincing myself that whoever this anonymous sender was, they had somehow managed to get their hands on something close to me. My pet, out of my house, as the topic of one of his twisted stories. How else could he have known that I had a cat? How could he have known my email address? Who the hell was he?!

Months went by. I graduated, I moved on in life, I got a job. I never did find Millie after that, never did find out who was emailing me. My old roommate assures me that she knew nothing about it. Occasionally, I’ll still get these strange emails, even after changing over to new addresses. New additions to the “Shock Factor” series, every time with a short description. The worst part is that… every time I receive a submission, it seems to happen just after I lose something… And whatever I lose ends up in the story. I’ll misplace a sewing kit, and find “Shock Factor Part 6: Stitching”, or I’ll lose a pair of scissors and receive “Shock Factor Part 9: Cutting Up.” It scares me, now. I dread checking my email, I’m paranoid, I never go out alone. It’s putting a lot of strain on me, and on my boyfriend, I make him go everywhere with me except to work.

The Shock Factor series has worked its way to Part 23 at this point… I don’t know how much more of this I can take…

If you ever see a submission from submissionfiller, an email titled “Shock Factor” or from the address submission.spacefiller, anything of the sort, please ignore it. For your own sake, ignore it – I don’t know if that would even work. It’s driving me crazy, I can’t go anywhere alone. I feel like someone is following me, like this stranger knows everything that goes on in my life. I don’t know how his stories got so realistic, either, but I don’t want to think about it.

I just got a text the other day, too, one that has driven me to the point of seeking legal help. I’m going to the police now, he has my phone number, and he’s not going to stay out of sight for forever.

“Part 30 will feature a guest star. I’m afraid that I’ll have to move on to finding a new editor after she has her episode, though. How unfortunate. I knew her so well.”

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31 Comments on 'Shock Factor'

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  • Commented on April 15, 2016 at 11:36 am

    Nice idea for a creepypasta. A creepypasta inside a creepypasta. Creepypastaception

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  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 12:28 pm

    I really liked this Creepypasta. It was not too creepy, but I thought it was weird in a good way.

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  • Commented on April 13, 2016 at 1:42 pm

    Just started using this site, and this is the first one I read?

    Absolutely fantastic.

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  • Commented on May 10, 2016 at 7:24 pm

    You should make stories that are the actual shock factor with the username submissionfiller.

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  • Commented on April 17, 2016 at 2:14 am

    This was a very original story. The plot twist was nice. It was not creepy though, but I almost believed that you were reviewing pasta in reality.

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  • Commented on April 14, 2016 at 2:55 pm

    I found this disappointing. You gave realistic ideals and very well done work, but could you have at least explain more about the stories? I mean it just felt like you skimmed over the story and was trying to text us what happened without letting someone take away your phone. It was great nonetheless though. Keep writing.

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  • Commented on April 16, 2016 at 4:17 am

    Out of all of the creepypastas of which I have read, I consider this the best one. It’s beyond clever and chilling, and the idea that it could happen to you is thrilling. I absolutely love it.

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  • ~happily depressed~
    Commented on May 1, 2016 at 11:58 pm

    very good story! i loved it! very spooky but but yet it still had one of those real vibes! you did a great job keep it up!!!!

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  • Commented on May 2, 2016 at 7:23 pm

    This CreepyPasta is really good 10/10 (☞゚ヮ゚)☞

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  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 4:36 pm

    [I liked it. It was very good and had me at the edge of my seat. It wasn’t all that creepy but I liked the suspense of it. spoiler][/spoiler]

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  • Commented on April 16, 2016 at 9:30 am

    I like the idea of this one, but the story needs more development. Unless I’m missing something, why does the protagonist assume the psycho is a “he”? And I’d also suggest jumping into the actual narrative faster. Too much wordiness in the beginning. Good start!

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  • Commented on April 26, 2016 at 4:44 pm

    I like it when a pasta ends with something scary.

    Just like our life will.

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  • Commented on April 30, 2016 at 5:25 pm

    love the idea seems so realistic

    i need more
    10/10

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  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 5:27 pm

    Love the way this story was written. Ending was kind of disappointing though.

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  • Commented on June 2, 2016 at 3:40 am

    An excellent story! One of my personal favorites right now! I think my favorite part is how it feels so natural in diction and so lifelike. Well done!

    On a related note, would you mind at all if I made a video with this story, all credit appropriately given? I’d love to hear back from you whenever you’re free. Thank you in advance for your time and have a great day! ^^

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  • Commented on April 18, 2016 at 8:36 am

    Agreeing with you here! I’ve been reviewing submissions for a while and as far as I remember, I haven’t been creeped out that much lately. Yours was a good pasta, a pretty creepy one at that.
    Thumbs up to you, I give you a 9.5/10
    (I found a few errors, so yeah)

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  • Commented on May 28, 2016 at 2:57 am

    Can someone link me that creepypasta of “shock factor”? I’m so lonely I need someone to stalk me everytime

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  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 5:39 pm

    10/10

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  • Commented on April 18, 2016 at 3:56 pm

    Well then… that was pretty good 10/10

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  • Commented on April 18, 2016 at 7:58 pm

    The ending is kind of a let down, but it is a good clever story.

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  • rinrin
    Commented on April 23, 2016 at 6:12 am

    it’s a great story and has a nice plot. but i think you should make the ending more clear.

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  • Commented on April 12, 2016 at 2:26 pm

    nice! im lovin’ this like mcdonalds <3

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  • Commented on May 1, 2016 at 8:17 pm

    The editor…

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  • Commented on May 10, 2016 at 7:00 pm

    yes

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  • Commented on June 6, 2016 at 3:45 pm

    10/10

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  • Commented on July 24, 2016 at 6:32 pm

    This story, was one of the best ive so far read on this site. The ending could have been better but it seems that the writer has tried to keep his story short.

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  • Commented on September 17, 2016 at 5:02 pm

    I really enjoyed this pasta. It was not the norm, but very intriguing.

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  • Commented on January 4, 2017 at 5:28 pm

    This was a good representation of mindfuck.
    Pasta(Plot/Story) and Sauce(Details) Plus more pasta (Cuz why da fuk not.)

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  • Commented on April 14, 2016 at 8:14 pm

    No…

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  • Commented on April 13, 2016 at 3:32 pm

    10/10 great pasta! I loved it and I hope I find a story named “Shock Factor”.

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  • Commented on April 28, 2016 at 12:20 am

    Gonna be quite honest here, not that great IMO.

    First off, the first 4 paragraphs have mostly nothing to do with the story, which is a big turn off.
    Second, not gonna lie, the “not until that night” and “I was so stupid…” are really annoying. You’ve got so much build up to something that honestly isn’t that scary, or even off-putting.
    Third, you address in the story that the character isn’t scared easily, if at all, so why would a little gore all of a sudden be the scariest thing that person had ever read?

    I vould go on, but I want to keep this comment short.

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