Slow Descent Into a Sadness Driven Insanity

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I ran, I ran as fast as my legs could take me. The acrid smell building inside the hallway made it hard to breathe. I was getting more tired and tired as each ounce of air was released from my lungs. For I knew he was getting closer, I knew that he would eventually grasp my arm with tremendous force, smashing it. I needed to get away. I needed to leave. I woke up sweating with tears coming from my eyes, probably from the fear of my dream. I stood up and before I could even put on any close, my mom entered the room to tell me that school was canceled because of a shooting that happened earlier this morning by a teacher. His name was Mr.Frentzel. He was always a little off in my opinion. Apparently he strangled the math teacher to death and then shot the Principle as he was trying to get the man off of her.

I was trying my hardest to keep this thought out of my mind as I got on my computer and looked at my steam messages. I found a message from one of my iFunny subscriptions notifying me of a giveaway that I won! I was so excited because he was a well known iFunny publisher! He told me to go into a trade to get the skin for CSGO. I won a AK47 Case Hardened worth about 24$. I immediately replaced the old, boring, default AK47 with that beauty, and started up a competitive match. I knew people would be jealous and I was right! People wanted to trade with me 24/7! I was almost overloaded with happiness and excitement when the man came into the room. He said that my mom was in a car accident on the way to work. I broke down and started to sob violently. I threw my monitor across the bedroom, shattering the old, 1990s screen. The man told me that his name was Joshua and that everything would be OK.

I walked to school with the sadness lingering behind me. I could not even talk to my girlfriend. She even gave me a dirty look as I just walked by her locker when she tried to talk to me. I moped past all of my friends as I went to first period. I could not even contain myself as I brake down crying in front of all of my first period classmates. The teacher sent me to the counselors office and I told her what I was going to so she sent me home so I would not embarrass myself anymore, an explanation that would not make sense to my dad.

My dad was extremely sympathetic as we would cry on each others shoulders multiple times a week. I missed my mom an unrealistically extreme amount. I could not contain the sadness sometimes. I once broke down in the supermarket while people stared until I eventually got kicked out. I walked into my room, trying to keep my sadness inside of me. I called my girlfriend and apologized for what I did today. She forgave me and I invited her to come over. She said she had something she needed to tell me, something important.

After she left I ran into my room and broke multiple pictures of my mom and my girlfriend. We had just broken up because of religious beliefs. She said she could not date someone that didn’t believe in god. My dad came in and yelled at me to stop this bullshit and to just get over it. He was right, destroying my material things is not going to do anything for myself or anyone else. I went to sleep hoping I would not have another one of those strange dreams.

I woke up with someone saying my name. It was my girlfriend. She told me that my dad had a massive heart attack and was in critical condition. I then pushed her aside and ran, I ran as fast as my legs could take me. I ran all the way to the bridge, which was not far away in anyway. I jumped, with complete reassurance that nothing bad would happen to me again. I then woke up on my bed, my caretaker coming in to give me my medication…

Original Author: CreepyBoy545

31 Comments on 'Slow Descent Into a Sadness Driven Insanity'

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  • Commented on May 29, 2015 at 2:48 am

    I really didn’t understand the plot of the story, it was all mixed up and didn’t really stamp itself in my ‘interesting’ book. The beginning and the ending were all really hazy and as I said, I didn’t understand one bit.

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  • Commented on May 26, 2015 at 9:32 pm

    Says the person who can’t even spell “writers” correctly @PsYcHo1986

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  • Commented on May 27, 2015 at 3:36 pm

    That was way too random. There wasn’t any content, no emotional connection to the characters, even the mc, and no plot. Read a couple good horror stories and give it another shot. 3/10

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  • Commented on February 18, 2016 at 5:53 am

    Ok, this one just made me lmao all the way through. Wtf did I just read?

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  • Commented on May 29, 2015 at 2:23 pm

    I don’t know… Definitely needs work and development but great idea.

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  • Commented on June 10, 2015 at 7:39 pm

    Lots of potential. Not enough work.

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  • Commented on May 30, 2015 at 7:24 am

    This was interesting, but I wasn’t always sure what was going on if I’m honest. The plot seemingly went in too many directions. Was it something to do with the computer, when he got a gun skin after the shooting? They could of gone in that direction. Were the dreams to blame? Was anything to do with the God reference , or was it just a breaking point? Or was he simply in a hospital the entire time, or some of the time?
    Overall, a good pasta but it was just too confusing with too many ideas for me to keep up. Keep focused on one solid idea next time you can play around with and make a really good pasta!

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  • Nephhyy
    Commented on July 22, 2015 at 2:37 pm

    This story was just…everywhere.

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  • Commented on October 16, 2015 at 7:53 pm

    This needs work you spelled clothes wrong.
    Like it needs so much work I don’t even have time to explain all of it.
    Take a writing class online or something.

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  • Commented on May 27, 2016 at 5:03 pm

    Soooo this story didn’t make sense (not trying to be offensive, just honest) for many reasons:
    -You said at the beginning that school was closed because of a shooting and then go on to talk about how the boy walks to school (did not specify whether this was another day, if it was).
    -A man named Joshua just randomly walks into this kid’s home and tells him his mother dies?
    -It’s not unrealistic to extremely miss your deceased mother
    -the girlfriend just randomly ends the relationship over religious beliefs
    – why would the girlfriend know that his dad had a heart attack before he did?
    -the dream at the beginning was random and didn’t make sense being included in the pasta at all.
    -the ak-47 skin for the computer game was irrelevant to the story.
    -there were a few spelling errors: close instead of clothes, brake instead of break.
    I realize that the character was dreaming all of this but it was just all over the place.

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  • Commented on June 19, 2015 at 2:52 pm

    Not trying to be a hater or anything, just speaking as a writer. The plot was not built up in a good way, and it didn’t transition well. It wasn’t explained at all and wasn’t interesting. All in all, it wasn’t my favorite. If the author had wrote it a bit better, I would have liked it more, but the story and plot line were not interesting or well written. Sorry, I’m rating it 1 out of 5.

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  • Commented on October 23, 2015 at 1:42 pm

    Also like lead up to stuff and he would of felt more about a shooting.
    He would of called his freinds and talked to them or something not just be like.
    “Oh yeah a shooting thats normal.”

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  • Commented on November 26, 2015 at 2:28 pm

    I don’t get it. Like…where is the plot of the story

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  • yourmom
    Commented on November 28, 2016 at 1:16 pm

    This is fucking garbage y’all are sugar coating a fucking turd with all this could be better bullshit fucking be real this story isn’t worth wiping my ass with because it’s shittier then shit

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  • Commented on March 3, 2017 at 8:09 am

    Not gonna lie but this extremely confused me…

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  • Commented on August 26, 2017 at 7:36 am

    Haha shittier than shit

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  • sally
    Commented on May 26, 2015 at 4:58 pm

    i didnt really like it it jumped to much

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  • Commented on May 30, 2015 at 7:25 am

    This was interesting, but I wasn’t always sure what was going on if I’m honest. The plot seemingly went in too many directions. Was it something to do with the computer, when he got a gun skin after the shooting? They could of gone in that direction. Were the dreams to blame? Was anything to do with the God reference , or was it just a breaking point? Or was he simply in a hospital the entire time, or some of the time?
    Overall, a good pasta but it was just too confusing with too many ideas for me to keep up.

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  • Commented on May 31, 2015 at 7:41 am

    I suppose that the author was trying to make something there with not very much knowledge to create an original that would stand up to others with better overall writing, but definitely has potential to make improvements.

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  • Commented on June 2, 2015 at 7:11 pm

    It’s okay, not really scary but I enjoyed it.

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  • Commented on July 5, 2015 at 1:24 am

    This pasta was definitely not long and stringy and connecting but more so like ziti. Very choppy and separated. I know you were trying to make it a mind fuck but I think you lost touch after the teacher going crazy. Every thing after was wEird. It’s okay. Always learn from criticism. You’re going to create the ultimate mind fuck one day

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  • Commented on October 23, 2015 at 1:40 pm

    Okay so, sort your ideas don’t just go as fast. Like if I’m making a story about Jimmy dying that its like.
    Little Jimmy woke up he wrenched open the window to let in the hot summer air.
    Quickly grabbing his bottle he drank the morning away.
    When little jimmy tried to go to bed he fell out of the window instead of the bed.

    Not
    LittleJimmywokeupandgotdrunkandfelloutofwindow.

    Just really this is good as a VERY VERY first time but man try a little harder. I know I sucked when I first started and my first novel was horrible but I evolved and now I can write full length stories with out them being horrible.

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  • Sydney
    Commented on December 10, 2016 at 5:58 pm

    It was OK I guess… There were alot of grammar and spelling errors and the plot was too all over the place. I did get how bad things wouldn’t stop happening to him tho .3.

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  • Commented on May 8, 2017 at 5:47 pm

    Props for the ifunny thing,but this was just a mess.

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  • cjblack
    Commented on June 4, 2017 at 6:37 am

    ha! I can’t tell if thish is a joke or not?

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  • Mojo
    Commented on January 28, 2016 at 10:47 am

    Wtf. This story sucked.

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  • gooby
    Commented on February 29, 2016 at 7:07 pm

    its dreams within dreams. its:
    -conflict
    -depression
    -wake up
    – false sense of safety
    -repeat
    Its pretty good I.M.O. 5/7

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  • Commented on June 19, 2016 at 4:40 pm

    the idea was great .. i feel if explored more and arranged better it will be amazing .. this version kind of just hits you and leaves you wondering what just happened and a confused with a little paranoia .. good mind fuck .. definitely great potential

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  • xKillerRainbowx
    Commented on May 27, 2015 at 3:37 pm

    OMG no LIE…. -.- dat Story Was GOOD >.< Dam *Perfect Ending !

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  • Commented on May 24, 2015 at 4:23 pm

    o jasus that is a real mindfuck i did not expect that ending

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  • Commented on May 25, 2015 at 12:41 pm

    Nothing interesting here most of the creepypasta whriters are tenage children limited within the comfortable normatives so its not scary at all

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