There had been many rumors of a shooting that was supposed to take place today. All these rumors had me on edge all day and I was still fidgeting in my seat even though I knew it would be fine and nothing would happen. It was lunch time when the school shooting was supposed to happen and that’s where I find myself right now. All I can think is that a school shooting would be such a terrible thing…
I see a kid open his backpack and maybe it’s him. Maybe it’s the kid standing in the lunch line right now. Or the shady kids hanging out at the back of the cafeteria. I’m just sitting there zoning out and thinking about all the possible things that could happen. Then somebody yells, “HE HAS A GUN!” There’s silence… And then panicked screams fill the air as bullets shred through the air. It’s such a terrible thing…
The principal is shot and bleeding out, the school police officer has had his knee caps blown out. The multiple other administrators are laying dying on the ground along with many students. There are screams and gunshots filling the air along with the scent of blood. So many screams, so much blood, such a terrible thing…
My hand slips and I blink a few times realizing I was just daydreaming and nothing had happened. A school shooting would be such a terrible thing, is what I think as I stand up pulling a gun out of my jacket. Such a terrible thing…
20 Comments on 'Such a Terrible Thing…'
Does the site owner know at least some of us can’t rate pastas? It shows as the picture unavailable thing and when the cursor goes on the ratings they disappear. Also, can’t use the feedback/report glitch as Recaptcha has been shut down so it expects a captcha but none show.
It’s a tad predictable, but I enjoyed the details.
The phrase “such a terrible thing” was, I think, a little overused, even as a keypoint. And the ending was kind of easily predictable. Nice one though.
Too bad that, as MattShizzle stated, it can’t be rated.
hi lol
The twist is what gave the story that extra push which made it enjoyable to read
I hope whoever wrote this shooter fantasy-porn crap is under some sort of monitoring by law enforcement.
Not cool
Tipped off to FBI. Good luck with the watch list. This isn’t even a creepypasta.
I really loved the use of “such a terrible thing” because it gave it a lot of meaning and depth. I was actually very stunned by the ending.
7/10
Nicely used ‘Such a terrible thing’ phrase which I would say, it need more detail. Concept used was running along the verge all the time. Keep up.
Decent story, but I have to agree with RoryHarmony, the title phrase was a little overstated. Also agree, the no rating is strange as well
[I dont know why he did that it was boring][/spoiler]
For all the people saying that the phrase is overused, I’m sure it’s meant to do that. It’s the title of the story.
good story
I would recommend to add extra detail
The story was pretty good
LOL YOUR a KILLER
@MattShizzle and @RoryHarmony… I agree with you guys
No ratings… Such a terrible thing
Oh and yeah I agree with @RoryHarmony and @MattShizzle
Sorry if this comment was repeated
Whoa… That was a twist!