“Tag”

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She made a playful squeal as I tagged her. It was clear she was enjoying herself, she was laughing herself to tears. “Daddy, stop it, my sides hurt!” She continued to laugh. Her joy was contagious, I smiled, for once in years, I smiled. I dare say I’ve smiled more that day than I have in my entire life. Alas, all good things must come to an end, she was tired, and fell asleep shortly after.
My wife soon came home. She was so glad to see me, she yelled my name, again, laughing to tears. She hugged me, still laughing. I continued to smile. She looked down and saw my tagging tool, quickly shooting her focus back to my eyes. I continued to smile. “Michael…” Tears continued to stream down her face in excitement. “How could you have done this to our little angel?” She tried to run, but she was too slow. “Tag…” I smiled wider. “You’re it.”

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  • Commented on July 27, 2014 at 10:04 am

    plot twist, he had knife.

    mystery solved.

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  • Commented on October 7, 2014 at 5:15 pm

    so when he said they were laughing to tears they were actually crying and when the mom hugged him she was actually trying to pull him back……..the girl didn’t squeal she screamed and the mom was screaming his name for him to stop……holy shit

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  • Commented on November 19, 2014 at 12:57 pm

    Amazing ending! Just like shoveing Mike into the suits!

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  • Commented on November 1, 2014 at 9:08 pm

    nice story

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  • Commented on December 10, 2014 at 8:34 pm

    Amazing — love the way the meaning was disguised in happiness! :)

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  • CreepsMcShockley
    Commented on December 7, 2014 at 10:02 pm

    I wish the shorties were all this good!

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  • Commented on January 8, 2015 at 4:35 pm

    Wow, that escalated quickly

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  • Commented on December 18, 2014 at 12:08 am

    It was short, sweet and creepy. It did the job!

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  • Commented on January 7, 2015 at 11:17 pm

    Intense plot twist that makes this all so intriguing.

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  • Commented on March 24, 2015 at 6:10 pm

    I like it! Short, but to the point ^-^

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  • Commented on August 29, 2014 at 11:58 pm

    I think this story was pretty good.

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  • Commented on August 26, 2014 at 1:50 am

    Well this was interesting

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  • Commented on January 14, 2015 at 4:20 pm

    Quite a twist, that’s apparently about all I have to say.

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  • Commented on January 16, 2015 at 6:13 pm

    Plot twist!

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  • Commented on February 23, 2015 at 3:34 pm

    I honestly thought that this was a happy pasta but the twist at the end was well done!

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  • Commented on January 13, 2015 at 3:54 am

    Amazing and very well written

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  • Commented on February 18, 2015 at 1:08 pm

    Oh my gosh. A knife. Absolutely amazing.

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  • Commented on February 19, 2015 at 2:38 am

    That plot twist though. 5/5

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  • Commented on February 28, 2015 at 7:52 pm

    Genius!

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  • Commented on April 1, 2015 at 11:26 am

    This is great short but really interesting…..I liked it so much!

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  • Commented on April 20, 2015 at 5:39 pm

    I quite thoughly enjoyed it i love how the fact that he was killing them was left a mystery till the end of the story

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  • Commented on April 24, 2015 at 6:48 pm

    Well … that was not what i was expecting 5/5

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  • Commented on April 29, 2015 at 7:30 pm

    It must have been Opposite day. xD

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  • PinkCrow
    Commented on January 27, 2015 at 1:04 pm

    Luvit!

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  • Commented on February 26, 2015 at 12:09 pm

    Good story

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  • Commented on March 13, 2015 at 2:56 pm

    I thought it was a well thought out CreepyPasta post, good work man!

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  • Commented on March 27, 2015 at 1:08 am

    that was pretty cool

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  • Mim
    Commented on April 10, 2015 at 11:08 am

    10/10 this is amazing

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  • Commented on April 10, 2015 at 5:56 pm

    i have question for you did you mean an actual tagging tool used on animals because its been known the bottom on a tagging tool can easly be broken off to kill a person and most known to be easyier by going for the ribs

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  • Commented on April 26, 2015 at 7:24 am

    Wow this was amazing, I really was not expecting that.

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  • Commented on May 8, 2015 at 3:38 pm

    reminds me of the dark knight. how joker killed people. mentally psycotic behaviour by the person who would do this kind of thing. i loved it. twisted and brutally awesome

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  • Commented on May 12, 2015 at 3:52 pm

    Well that blows… good story though….

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  • Commented on May 14, 2015 at 6:43 pm

    I am amazed that someone thought of this it was perfect and consisted of all perfect qualities a pasta can have! 10/10

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  • Commented on May 25, 2015 at 7:56 pm

    I don’t think this guy knows how to play tag… anyways, it was a really good story.

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  • Commented on May 30, 2015 at 7:14 am

    This was a really good short Creepypasta!
    I absolutely love the plot twist and the way everything was set up. I hope the author keeps writing, and that he (and others) can put this quality of twist into longer pastas.

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  • Unkown
    Commented on June 2, 2015 at 7:25 pm

    Meh… didn’t like it. :p

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  • Commented on June 2, 2015 at 7:38 pm

    I was wrong, I liked it. I was lying. ; o ;

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  • Commented on August 3, 2014 at 6:14 am

    Good story…

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  • Commented on March 24, 2015 at 6:51 pm

    Great Pasta. 5/5. I liked out you used the “tagging tool” and the laughter as a disguise for torture and knives.

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  • Commented on April 7, 2015 at 12:42 pm

    I absolutely love this story. Because you sugar coated the story’s true meaning, and at the end showed us that what looked like an innocent story, turned out to be more sinister. Very good story, well done! 😀

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  • Commented on April 8, 2015 at 3:43 pm

    This is one of those “Criminal Happiness” stories. I absolutely love these because it adds to how insane these type of people are. If you ever go to youtube, search up “Meet the Pyro”, and it’s an exact example of what I mean by Criminal Happiness. What he thinks he is doing is good, but in reality, he doesn’t realize he’s ending innocent lives. 4/5

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  • Commented on April 10, 2015 at 3:00 am

    Makes me think of Stephen King and H. P. Lovecraft with the whole plot twist.

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  • Commented on April 10, 2015 at 8:53 pm

    Creepy story. An awesome thing to achieve in such a short story. Congrats. 4/5

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  • Commented on April 21, 2015 at 6:39 am

    This could have been better if the father found the crying of the child funny.

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  • Commented on April 27, 2015 at 3:58 pm

    well.. then X_X that escalated quickly, and was unbelievably twisted… i wish i did that good

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  • Commented on May 7, 2015 at 6:42 am

    I LOVEEEEEEEE THIS!! so simple short and sweet. Ive read it over 5 times at least so far….great to get adrenalin going…….classic already to me

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  • Commented on May 14, 2015 at 6:05 pm

    Took a small wile for me to get what was going on. So the father’s “tagging tool” was a knife and this story reversed everything that is in a murder story.

    The daughter ran as quickly as she could as her father chased her. Her legs grew weak and she tripped and her father quickly caught up with her and she could see him holding a knife. Before she could say anything her father stabbed her in her side and she began to cry and sob pleading with her father. The mother soon arrived seeing the father stabbing there child she pleaded with him to stop and he went after her as well. In the end the father ends up killing the mother as well.

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  • Commented on May 26, 2015 at 2:33 am

    Sounds like a violent rape to me. “tagging tool”

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  • Commented on May 29, 2015 at 12:23 am

    holy cow!!!! this is a good plot twist!!! i like it XD

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  • Commented on June 2, 2015 at 7:37 pm

    Eh, a bit creepy. That’s it.

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  • Commented on June 8, 2015 at 10:14 pm

    Wow. It’s so amazing how someone can get such creepiness into such a short story and keeping the gore factor low.

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  • jeff da killa
    Commented on June 17, 2015 at 9:59 pm

    y was the little girl laughing

    maby she was crying and the dad was coco balls so he heard her laughing

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  • Commented on March 11, 2015 at 5:54 pm

    I enjoyed this one. Short and sweet and a cool idea of a twist. Good work. 3/5

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  • Commented on May 5, 2015 at 12:26 pm

    woah. :O What a turn of events.

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  • Commented on May 6, 2015 at 11:44 am

    Pretty good short story. Could have more action to it. Like making the kill less easy and more like a chase or something like that.

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  • Commented on May 8, 2015 at 4:42 pm

    hooooolllllyyyyy shhhiiiittt… wow i did not expect that

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  • Commented on May 8, 2015 at 5:05 pm

    The twist was really good i liked it 5/5

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  • Commented on May 10, 2015 at 11:15 pm

    omg i have read this so many times. it is just amazing

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  • Commented on June 10, 2015 at 3:25 pm

    This was actually really good, it is short which I like because I really can’t be bothered to read much but that was actually good!

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  • Commented on June 25, 2015 at 6:12 pm

    Well .. Wasn’t that beautiful ..

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  • Bogman
    Commented on June 27, 2015 at 4:19 am

    Did a reading for this https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G-9eoMRfMd8

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  • Commented on July 7, 2015 at 10:07 am

    That was very well done, keep it up!

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  • Commented on July 8, 2015 at 8:31 pm

    i did not expect that plot twist .-.

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  • Commented on July 20, 2015 at 3:19 pm

    Great twist in the ending and the way you disguise things with happiness is brilliant.

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  • Commented on July 23, 2015 at 6:14 pm

    Oh wow, gotta love a good plot twist. Interesting way to tell the story from the father’s mind though, him taking their pleads to be spared as fun and games. Whoever wrote it should be proud~.

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  • Commented on July 23, 2015 at 11:49 pm

    Lol my name is Michael

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  • jess
    Commented on July 28, 2015 at 3:39 pm

    well that was totally not expected 100 out of 100 cookie cats

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  • Unkown
    Commented on June 2, 2015 at 7:23 pm

    Meh… didn’t really like it. :p

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  • Commented on July 19, 2015 at 5:56 pm

    I love it

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  • Commented on June 5, 2015 at 9:15 pm

    i was not expecting that. I thought that it would turn out his daughter was dead or something. 9.7/10

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  • Commented on April 1, 2015 at 11:15 pm

    I didn’t like it. To me, the kill too easy.

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