The Itch

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It all started with a slight itch on the tip of my right middle finger. I absentmindedly scratched at it, and continued playing Minecraft. I soon forgot about it entirely, as a Creeper blew up the house I had worked on for an hour, as Creepers often do. I cursed and began to rebuild.

My rebuilding took me long into the night, as I had to gather more supplies. When I looked at my phone, the clock said 2:30 am! It was time to crash, or I would be useless in the morning. I slept well, without any dreams. Only sweet blackness.

I awoke feeling refreshed, eager to start the day. It wasn’t until I gripped my shirt that I felt a stab of excruciating pain from my finger. I stared in shock. The tip was black and a foul white liquid was oozing from a small hole. What the fuck? How had this happened?

I frantically scrubbed it clean, moaning in pain and disgust as I squeezed it slightly. The pus flowed out of it, coating my sink with a nasty smelling slime. I grimaced and squeezed harder. Something popped, and the pus spurted in my face. I dry heaved immediately, nearly falling.

Frantically I wiped my face clean. I’d need to take a long shower to get through this shit. Still the finger oozed, though more slowly this time. Blood began to seep out of it as well, so I poured peroxide over it and bandaged the wound. Much better.
However, my satisfaction at this was short lived. The true horror came when I lifted my shirt.

My stomach was nearly covered in black sores, each leaking that same despicable slime. I couldn’t hold it back anymore. I vomited everywhere. To my shock, I had thrown up more of the white stuff. What was happening to me? Am I going to die?

It was then that I felt the powerful, screaming itch all over my body. I began to scratch, taking chunks of flesh with each scrape of my nails. I couldn’t help myself, don’t you get it? I couldn’t stop!
There was blood and pus everywhere. The room was beginning to fade.

I blacked out, and when I came to- you were the first person I saw. I don’t understand why you’re looking at me like that, don’t you see the fucking sores?! They’re everywhere!

Official report:

YOUNG MALE, APPROXIMATELY 23 YEARS OLD TAKEN INTO CUSTODY. IN ROUTE TO PSYCH WARD FOR EVAL. SUBJECT IS CLAIMING SORES ARE ALL OVER HIS BODY. NO SORES IN SIGHT, BUT HE HAS NEARLY SCRATCHED HIMSELF RAW. POSSIBLE DRUG ABUSE.

Pat (last name censored)
01/02/2015

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 3:40 pm

    ummm
    good job?

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 3:53 pm

    I truly enjoyed this short tale

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 4:56 pm

    it was good at the beginning then it just went down hill

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 5:03 pm

    Thanks guys. This one was sent in as a partial.. The real story was fifteen pages and I am using my phone for stories. I honestly didn’t think it would get accepted.

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 8:21 pm

    ha he was dalushanal

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  • Commented on December 7, 2015 at 11:28 pm

    That escalated quickly

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  • Commented on December 8, 2015 at 12:51 pm

    I too, am surprised it was approved. I rejected it during reviews. I’d like to read the 15 page version though.

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  • Commented on December 8, 2015 at 3:03 pm

    *COUGH COUGH* CLICHÉ *COUGH COUGH*

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  • PyschoMangleGirl
    Commented on December 8, 2015 at 6:46 pm

    AWESOME! Love the report at the end… leaves the imagination to go wild! Keep writing!

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  • Commented on December 8, 2015 at 6:55 pm

    Cool

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  • Commented on December 8, 2015 at 7:26 pm

    This was creepy made me feel sick it sounds disgusting and made my body feel itchy.-5 stars

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  • Commented on December 8, 2015 at 10:16 pm

    I feel like this story was kind of… rushed? But then again, this isn’t the whole thing, you said that there are fifteen pages to this story. But you still did pretty good. It was creepy and made me gag a little bit so good job. Keep it up.

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  • Commented on December 9, 2015 at 2:22 am

    I really like how it went innocent then brutal

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  • Commented on December 9, 2015 at 6:32 pm

    Wow that was really detailed and disturbing…

    good job. Althoug I’m interested on how someone could go on about this for 15 pages.

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  • Commented on December 9, 2015 at 8:04 pm

    Really good but kind of escalated quickly.

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  • Commented on December 9, 2015 at 8:35 pm

    Hey it wasn’t that bad I digged it. It just needed more encouragement put into it. But good job c:

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  • Commented on December 10, 2015 at 1:38 pm

    It was pretty good, though it escalated very quickly and had stopped at climax. I would give it a 5 star for potential, 2-3 stars for organization, and 3-4 stars for creepiness. Overall 3 stars. I would love to read the 15 page version.

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  • Commented on December 10, 2015 at 1:56 pm

    It was awesome and don’t let people give you shit about it I like how you made the character relatable in many was and the part when he tried to scratch the “spores” off was really cool.

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  • Commented on December 10, 2015 at 2:26 pm

    good health going downhill fast

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  • Commented on December 10, 2015 at 4:58 pm

    Good ending, I think he isnt crazy. 10/10

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  • Commented on December 11, 2015 at 9:33 am

    Decent story I suppose. Too rushed though.

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  • Commented on December 11, 2015 at 5:42 pm

    lol I read this to my friend and she gagged! Yes!

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  • Ann2015
    Commented on December 12, 2015 at 6:22 am

    Need something further, explaining the sores…

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  • Commented on December 12, 2015 at 6:51 pm

    This processed a little fast. Leaves me wanting a more detailed story line.

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  • Commented on December 13, 2015 at 6:05 am

    Thanks for the support guys. I will type up the longer version. If it takes a long time to be approved, I’ll post a link. To the people who posted rude comments, I am well aware this was not great quality. I will improve. Not everyone does amazingly well at first.

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  • Commented on December 16, 2015 at 4:20 pm

    I loved the basic story plot. If it was fleshed out a little bit more it could be a stellar story.

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  • Commented on December 17, 2015 at 3:08 pm

    Ew awesome but ew XD

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  • Commented on December 25, 2015 at 7:51 am

    i named my creepypasta The Itch as well……
    http://www.creepypasta.org/pending/the-itch-4#
    does this comment count as spam now?

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  • Commented on February 1, 2016 at 5:47 pm

    Nice. The Doctor would approve. Also, just to say it, DIE DALEK, DIE!!!!

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  • Commented on June 6, 2016 at 3:08 pm

    Great pasta! Fits perfectly with the ‘Madness’ tag. 8.5/10

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  • Commented on September 19, 2016 at 12:55 am

    I liked the story, it was a good idea and a fun ending. I feel as if it did stop at the climax, and I’d like to read the 15 page version.
    Nonetheless, good job.

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  • Commented on November 4, 2016 at 3:24 pm

    that went from a 2 to a 10 pretty quickly…

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  • Commented on February 16, 2017 at 12:05 am

    great pasta. loved the ending

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  • Commented on April 3, 2017 at 2:21 am

    Loved it :3 It was super gross but cool.

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  • Commented on April 9, 2017 at 10:03 pm

    Thank you guys for the encouragement. I gave up on my account here for the most part because I had had some really awful comments before. I came back to check it and I am very flattered. A lot of my stories do wind up a bit rushed, because I am usually stressed when writing. Thank you kindly.

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  • Commented on May 8, 2017 at 7:00 pm

    Pat is actually a minecraft YouTuber

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  • Commented on May 10, 2017 at 1:41 am

    Booooring

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  • Commented on May 10, 2017 at 12:47 pm

    Pretty boring not much of a plot twist or anything really spooky. There was some ok details . . . keep writing and try to get better!

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  • Foxfire
    Commented on May 24, 2017 at 8:07 am

    …now this one is interesting, particularly because its not entirely implausible. Especially if you focus on the very real horror that is experiencing various parasthesias and neurologic misfires.

    There’s actually a pretty a well-known medical incident of a woman scratching into her brain due to a persistent ‘phantom’ itch from about …a decade or so ago? This kind of horror feels very in the same vein for me.

    I think the focus on the gross-out factor is somewhat overdone – the way it was described distanced me from the narrative, I mean – but depending on how that’s written next time, it could prove jarring in a good way. It just seemed too…descriptive eww for the audience, not present-active-thoughts if that makes sense? (Tho i recognize the challenge here, evoking body horror is hard!)

    I look forward to reading the updated version.

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  • Commented on July 22, 2017 at 12:44 am

    Woah, what a freaky quick story, love it
    4/5

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  • Commented on October 30, 2017 at 1:33 pm

    Well… it wasn’t horrible, but the pasta wasn’t perfect. You had a lot of potential when the story began, but it was sent directly down hill. I understand you tried to compact it from a fifteen page story, you could’ve made it a bit larger to keep the climax going longer. 3/5

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