At about the age of ten,
I saw him once but not again.
The man who came from out of town,
The man who wore the blood-soaked crown.
It was the night of Friday eve,
Which from my bed I did not leave.
Out my window I stole a glance,
And saw him there just by chance.
He was tall and thin and made of dark,
His mere presence made dogs bark.
For from his shape he whistled high,
A tune so eerie I can’t deny.
He slinked and stepped along the street,
The sound of sloshing at his feet.
A trail of crimson lay behind,
His next victim he was to find.
He grabbed a blade and on his arm,
He carved a line into a charm.
It was how he kept his body count,
Which looked high from the amount.
A small boy play in a park nearby,
With lots of laughter and a joyful cry.
Then the man turned to him,
A deep grey shadow for a grin.
His face had no features that I could see,
Just deep indents where they would be.
His smile grew wide I must confess,
But nothing prepared me for what was next.
He moved into a jog towards the boy,
Then the child dropped his toy.
He screamed for help but no one came,
He called “Mum! Dad!” and then a name.
A name I had not heard before,
But had seen a few times or maybe more.
It was a name that inspired fear,
But what the hell was he doing here?
He was the stuff of myth, of tales to scare,
With bloodstained clothes and matted hair.
I pressed my face to the glass,
And saw how long the boy did last.
It wasn’t long, in fact was quick,
The boy’s blood was red and thick.
Then the man raised him up high,
The figure then squeezed him dry.
He never stopped his whistled song,
He tapped his foot and swayed along.
As if it were just a show,
His smile did begin to grow.
The blood it ran like a stream,
The cool night air made it steam.
He threw the body to the ground,
It did not move or make a sound.
The boy was dead but he wasn’t done,
The figure laughed as though it were fun.
He pulled a saw and began to cut,
Not the head just everything but.
It wasn’t til he had done his task,
That the man began to laugh.
He threw the bits around the park,
But by this time it was getting dark.
I could not see what happened next,
I just ran over to my desk.
His noise grew loud and from what I could hear,
Was almost whispered in my ear.
It was out of rhythm and made me scared.
And what came next I was not prepared.
On my window I heard a tap,
I looked over and he looked back.
His face was pale as pale could be,
And then he pointed straight at me.
The window opened without a noise,
Blood was dripping, it was the boy’s.
It would seem he wants his tale to be told,
With his skin so pale and his clothes of old.
I sit here writing as he watches,
And on his charm he’s carving notches.
I am aware that he can see
The words I write in front of me.
I hope he decides to show remorse,
Wishful thinking on my part of course.
If you find this and read it through,
I hope he does not come for you.
His legend is his way he moves,
The bloody trail of his shoes.
In stories and songs you’ll find him there,
Please make sure you are prepared.
For if you hear his offbeat tune,
Then he might be after you.
He has his hand upon my shoulder,
The room was warm but now is colder.
I must end this tale of him,
The story of the bloodied king.
At about the age of ten,
I saw him once but not again.
The man who came from out of town,
The man… who wore… the blood-soaked… crown.
73 Comments on 'Tune'
whoa this legit gave me shivers…5/5
I love how well you can picture it happening. Great detail, 5/5
Wow. Just wow. 5/5 all the way.
This was really good, genuinely creepy and original.
That whole time I thought it was going to be a slender man story
Am I the only one who thought it was Jeff the Killer
very well done, thank you for this
i loved this pasta. best poem pasta i have seen so far. 10/10
wow i didn’t expect that to end like that 5/5
sex hahahahah
Wow…That was Amazing. Great detail. I could picture it vividly. 10/10
Love this Creepypasta, it was the best I’ve read for a while. 7/7
This is the first creepypoem I’ve actually enjoyed! 5 stars!
Who was this about? i was confused
Love it.
Unique for a Poem Pasta. I betcha we are gonna start posting fan art.
I loved how it’s a poem but it still tells a great story. great pasta 5/5
I loved this. the ryhming sceme made it 100x better
I find this one satisfying to my tastes
Wonderful
On the part where it saidIf you find this and read it through,
I hope he does not come for you. I started hearing whistling it scared the crap out of me 10/10 great pasta
That was amazing.
whoa i thought it was jtk
10/10 amazing!
DOES ANYONE KNOW WHO THE HECK THEY ARE TALKING ABOUT ????
Loved it though. 5/5
very boring poem…..i dint like it at allllll
I can’t thank all of you enough. I honestly didn’t think this would get the amazing support it has. You guys are truly the greatest.
Thank you again 🙂
Great pasta poem, just wondering though, who is the pasta its about? Is it Slenderman?
Amazing
10/10
10/10 satisfyingly creepy 🙂
Dont want to sleep anyway
thoroughly enjoyed 5/5
A+
i thought is was a little confusing at first but it grew on me like the size of the little boys blood puddle
I really love the formatting of this creepypasta. I will honestly say that it is one of my favorite creepypastas. I hope to see more of your work!
I will say that if you like Jeff the Killer or Slender man, you will really enjoy this.
The way this is written like a poem really makes it creepier. A truly tasty pasta?
Great poem i give it a 9/10
really cool, i am personally not afraid cause I’m not 10 :/
The title is really appropriate.
Very creepy. Sent shivers down my spine. Great read.
this story is very sp00ky i peed my self
I really enjoyed this one. Abit Poe-esque and with great rhymes aswell.
BTW, how do you know if your creepypasta has been rejected? I wrote one which seems to be in the pending-category still. It´s called “The Man in the White Shirt”.
omg that is soooo good! I love the detail!
FUCK dude holy shit. I enjoy these type of creepypastas.
Hey, not bad. I’m thinking about submitting my own Pasta. Probably won’t be scary tho. XD
This is a great creepy pasta and I love it! Stories like these make my blood run cold.
I love the cold 10/10
Wondering who it was about cause I thought Slenderman but then not.. but great story 😀
Truly amazing. Great execution, story, and pace, as well as the rhyme scheme. I liked it alot, on a scale of 1 to 10…I’d give it a 15.
Holy crap this was amazing
Wow, awesome piece of writing. It was extremely well written and I never got even close to being board or loosing focus on your story. I loved it! It’s the best one I’ve read in a while.
I don’t know about you, but if I was the little kid I’d be flailing my arms screaming, “Stranger danger!”
I am not sure if this is proper etiquette with a CreepyPasta submission BUT, I would once again like to thank everyone for the OVER-WHELMING amount of support on here. I never expected this.
There have been people doing readings of this on YouTube and there has been some interestingly amazing artwork that has come from this.
PLEASE keep the artwork coming. It’s all amazing and a sizable chunk of it is now printed and placed upon my wall.
Again I would like to thank everyone who has helped this become what it is.
Stay amazing you guys.
-SpydaBarnes
ok im am the bloody swordsman i get it but i don’t go around killing people infact i make myself bleed so i’m stained red of blood
It was pretty good, the poem idea was original but it was a bit tedious to read rhyming words all the way through, but good I rate 10/10
I truthfully thought the writer was describing slender man but when said bloody crown i thought what?
OH GOD IM 17!!
Amazing Story there !
Made a video out of it and of course left a link to here.
If someone wants to check it out heres the link:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jo1kwhwhK9c
That was…bland. Unoriginal and a tad trite. It’s poetry, so I can understand how the gimmick carries it to popularity, but the language is so forced and cheesy.
Why was a kid playing in the park at night? Because plot convenience?
Have to admit this poem is good. And dark.
Was this supposed to be Victor Zsasz? :”D
i reeaaally enjoyed reading this alot more fun than others probably because it was a poem but i need to ask was it slendy?
5/5. Keep writing. Keep refining your art.
Quite a creepypasta. Very intriguing. Good job writer.
I love it! My only critique is that the meter was a little off in some stanzas, but the poem itself was interesting and enjoyable with wonderful imagery!
Am I the only one who thinks creepy heartless killers like this would be cute anime dudes?
A lot of the lines seemed forced, messing up the flow of the story. Like certain lines and words are only there so the previous line has something to rhyme with.
Sometimes it’s better for a poem to not have perfect rhymes.
I’m negative, I naturally pick up on flaws. Sry
I started reading it at loud but went silent after awhile.
Why do I love this?!
What? Hmmmmmmm…….