Why I Won’t Go to Mockingbird Park

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There’s a reason I won’t go to Mockingbird Park,

Not just ‘cause it’s creepy, not just ‘cause it’s dark;

There are twisty twined trees, there are weeds and neglect,

But worse than all that is the “mocking” effect.

As you walk the park paths, you’ll hear a faint echo –

Footfalls – your own? – in that dim and grim ghetto,

Coming closer and closer as if someone’s there…

You whirl and see no one, just fog on the air.

So you whistle – it whistles. You cough – and it coughs.

Then from murky mists a gray shadow breaks off.

It’s your height and your size and your very same shape,

And then it’s upon you, no time to escape!

You suck in cold air, and then – poof – it moves through you.

You laugh at yourself – a shadow can’t chew you!

But you turn and see someone who’s walking away,

This person – your double! – you glimpse with dismay.

They continue their strolling on down the park trail,

While you melt into mist, a fog of gray veil.

And that’s why I won’t go back to Mockingbird Park –

I like being you.

I hope you like the dark.

Original Author: IPostAtMidnight

24 Comments on 'Why I Won’t Go to Mockingbird Park'

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  • Commented on May 13, 2016 at 1:07 pm

    I actually passed this in the reviewing pasta’s. I enjoyed it a lot.

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  • Commented on May 13, 2016 at 2:44 pm

    Short and sweet with a nice atmosphere, just the way I like it! Well done.

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  • Commented on May 13, 2016 at 7:37 pm

    I really enjoyed this. There was the twist in the end that fit perfectly into the story. Well done

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  • Commented on May 15, 2016 at 2:13 am

    Ooh, this pasta reminds me of butter cream frosting. It’s smooth, sweet and tasty.

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  • Commented on May 16, 2016 at 2:24 am

    This story is awesome, it’s a really unique creepypasta that reminds me of a Edgar Allen Poe. And he is known as one of the best horror writers of all time. And it makes you have to think about the story and read it a few more times. This story is just excellent.

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  • Commented on May 16, 2016 at 2:38 am

    It’s a good poem pasta that rhymes. It has a chilly atmosphere and it auctually left my thoughts to wander into darker areas… well done! 4/5

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  • zoha
    Commented on May 23, 2016 at 11:51 am

    It was excellent i liked it a lot the words were rhyming and it was meaningful poem
    5/5

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  • Commented on May 31, 2016 at 8:55 pm

    The twist ending is awesome. The poem is well written and gives a glimpse of all the horror going on in mockingbird park. Leaves the rest up to the imagination.

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  • Commented on May 13, 2016 at 1:26 pm

    I also reviewed it and since I’m not much into poetry, I did enjoy this pasta. It was a good surprise.

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  • Commented on May 14, 2016 at 1:28 am

    i had to read it twice to understand it. [the i like being you part got me][/spoiler]

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  • Commented on May 16, 2016 at 9:11 pm

    I reviewed this like 6 months ago. People, including me, like creepypoems.

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  • Commented on May 20, 2016 at 5:07 am

    Dang crap. This is skill. I thought it would be really lame and then I got a bit in and realized it was going somewhere and that twist ending got me good. I appreciate this poem.

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  • Commented on June 2, 2016 at 4:33 am

    This was really good. 5/5 from me. It was definatley long enough yet short enough to keep me interested the whole time. And I loved the ending. Great job!

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  • Commented on May 15, 2016 at 12:20 pm

    I remember reviewing this pasta, it was really good

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  • Commented on May 25, 2016 at 2:05 pm

    This Is a Great Story

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  • Commented on May 26, 2016 at 9:38 am

    Creepily-cute. I dig it. Compliments to the chef. Peace n stuff

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  • Commented on May 30, 2016 at 6:45 pm

    Very nice, short, and sweet.

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  • Commented on October 17, 2016 at 4:23 pm

    me likey

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  • Commented on June 5, 2016 at 4:21 am

    Nice poem, plus it rhymes and is creepy, excellent!

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  • Alex wes
    Commented on June 29, 2016 at 1:06 am

    Lets work on a story. Find me on Facebook. Im Alex Wes Craven

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  • Commented on January 1, 2017 at 7:07 am

    I liked it. The twist at the end

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  • Commented on January 20, 2017 at 4:40 am

    I seriously love this structure!! What an amazing creepypasta – so original and yet still really gets you at the end. Amazing work!! 🙂

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  • Commented on May 28, 2016 at 9:16 am

    I’m not shure if it’s because I’m stupid but I don’t get it

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  • Commented on May 12, 2016 at 10:17 pm

    Well, it rhymes…

    Nice poem, but not really my cup of creepypasta

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