Do you have someone you hate? Someone you would do anything to hurt, pay any price for vengeance? If so, you may want to consider visiting Lightless City.
To get there, go to any decent sized city and find a deserted alleyway at night. Go into it, and close your eyes as tightly as you can. Whisper “Lightless City”, and concentrate on the darkness. You’ve probably noticed that there are faint colors and abstract shapes you can make out if you try to focus your eyes when they’re closed, watch those images go by. After a few minutes, the images should start to get clearer and brighter.
When this happens, they’ll start taking on detailed forms, images of violent murders, deformed animals, and similar things. No matter what you see, keep your eyes closed. You’ll start to lose track of time, but eventually the images will stop, and you’ll see pure darkness, nothing but deep black, no colors or shapes. When you’re certain that you see pure darkness, open your eyes.
You will now be in a very dark city; there won’t be a single light or star in the sky. You should be able to see a faint dark blue outline of the tall buildings surrounding you. Make your way out of the alley, and walk as quietly as you can down the sidewalk, in any direction.
If you hear any movement, RUN, as quickly as you can, away from the noise. There are animals in Lightless City. It’s too dark to make out the details, but they’re the size of large, wild felines and will kill any human they catch. Keep moving until you reach an area with smaller buildings, the edge of the city.
A child will approach you, his face dully glowing, letting you see that he is eyeless.
He will ask “Will you share your light with me?”
Say yes, the child will reach for your face and rip out your right eye. It will be painful, but there shouldn’t be any bleeding or open wound. The child will thank you and leave. Keep walking, and a tall man will appear before you.
“Whose light do you wish to have taken away?”
Speak the name of the person you hate, and as soon as you say their name, they will go completely and irreversibly blind.
“Is your hatred satisfied?” the man will ask. If it is, say yes, and you will awaken in the alley. If not, say no, and the man will disappear. Keep walking. You will come across another eyeless child.
“Will you share your light with me?”
Say yes, and your left eye will be torn out, leaving you blind. Keep walking, and the tall man will appear again, although you of course will have to rely on his voice.
“Whose life do you wish for the darkness to claim?”
Say the name of the one you hate, and they will die. You will not be asked if your hatred is satisfied this time, and you will not be able to return to the alley. I told you to make sure you really hated someone before doing this, you will spend the rest of your life wandering around Lightless City, blind, with only your hatred to keep you warm.
For some people, that’s enough.
35 Comments on 'Lightless City'
Very good story!
One of my favorites.
Now I’m tempted to try this… But I’m not that evil ^^; Great story!
worth it 🙂
I actually want to try this. I have a few people in my life that…don’t particularly need their sight. Hee hee…
Really good story!
That was nice xD
Very delicious 10/10!
Really tasty pasta. The only thing I could say is that if I had wrote it (not that I have NEARLY as much creativity as yourself), I would have included a twist at the end where you are now one of the children, stealing eyes for yourself as you have none. Regardless, 9 if not 10 out of 10 to you, good Sir.
Im stay in the lighless city for Justin Bieber and 1D
To MiniNipples, that’s actually how I thought this was going to end. Anyway, the story has a really nicely eerie feeling to it.
I was just wondering that if you take away someone’s sight is your eye gone forever and if not an you go back to wish death or blindness apon more people? Anyways I do love the story 8/10. I’d also like to invite you to read my creepypastas :-3 keep up the creepy work lol
Ooo I like this! though…my first thought was that you’d never be able to complete it because you’d get robbed in that dark alleyway or worse
This is a really good pasta. I would love to try this, but only if I get my eye back when I return.
Awesome story
i want to do this to the person who ruined my familys life
Whose light do you wish to have taken away? Hmm….. Justin Bieber :p 10/10 awesome story 🙂
Good story 🙂
awesome
That was a nice little tid bit of a story great job!
I guess it’s a good thing I’m left eye dominant.
I liked it. It was well put together. I give it a 4/5.
This is a very good story
I would not like to be there I LIKE MY EYES!
Great story, I have to agree that it would be better if you ended as a blind child stealing eyes, But i digress well done
Then some idiot gives their eye for Helen Keller
But what happens if the person you hate already is blind 0.o? Anyways nice pasta liked it alot
I’m not giving my eyes to kids that say ‘Will you share your light with me?” NO way!!! That ALONE is creepy. OMG NO!!!!!!![[spoiler]
I tried this … the first eyeless child stole my watch 🙁
I would literally, not figuratively, run out of organs….
I didn’t like it don’t ever wast your time with it just bullshit. sorry I’m just saying honestly boring
What a great pasta
i’ve always liked this story… but what if the eyeless child asked you to share the light with them and you say no?
Nice story. It short but holds a lot of weight.
kind of reminds me of the Hammurabi code, an eye for a eye, love this !!!