The Cry


A cry woke me in the middle of the night. It’s as if a girl was trying hard to muffle her desperate cries of help so as to keep something from hearing her. My heart started to pound with fear as I was reminded of some scenes from horror films involving creepy, crying ghost girls. I badly wanted to wake my room mate who was sleeping across my bed but it is impossible to wake her up for she is such a heavy sleeper.

I didn’t dare open my eyes. I’ve heard some creepy stories about our dormitory but I don’t want them to experience first hand. So like a frightened child I hastily covered myself with my blanket and turned to face the wall. Ignoring the cries, I willed my scared self to get some sleep.

I woke up from an uneasy sleep the next day to see my room mate with a strange, frightened expression on her face.

“So you heard it too?” I hastily asked. “That creepy crying sounded horrible! I wasn’t able to sleep properly last night!”

With a haunted voice, she replied, “Th-that was me who was crying when I saw you levitating from your bed.”

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  • Commented on October 1, 2013 at 8:12 pm

    More weird, than creepy but I liked it.

  • Commented on October 4, 2013 at 8:53 pm

    I think the concept really has potential. I do think that the finishing sentence needs to be a little more subtle, not so much hinting at exactly what she saw, but more that ‘something’ was terribly wrong, after all she could have been having a vivid nightmare. His room mate didn’t come across all that frightened in her sentence, too.

    “I was reminded of some scenes from horror films involving creepy, crying ghost girls.”, i’m not sure if this detail is needed, to be honest. It made my head turn your story into something generic/cliche. I’d rather my mind create it’s own unique visions along with your story.

    I’d love to see more from you! <3

  • Commented on October 24, 2013 at 3:44 pm

    LOVED IT. Why is this so under-rated?
    Keep up the good work, fellow pasta lover.

  • Commented on November 2, 2013 at 1:52 am

    strong ghost

  • Commented on December 13, 2013 at 7:50 pm

    whoa O_O love this. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to any future work from you.

  • Commented on March 28, 2014 at 12:07 am

    Idk, i mean, i dont get the levitation part. Maybe it would be better if you added something about why or how she was levitating. But good job!

  • Commented on April 3, 2014 at 9:47 am

    The only crying in this story was me when I read how bad it was.

  • Commented on January 29, 2015 at 5:04 pm

    not very good..i didn’t like the ending

  • Commented on February 24, 2015 at 5:56 pm

    what the…

  • Commented on February 24, 2015 at 7:40 pm

    hahaha : D got me good, real nice

  • Commented on March 11, 2015 at 6:48 pm

    I love the twist

  • Commented on June 24, 2015 at 12:13 pm

    I loved it! Hit me good at the end! ~taco

  • Commented on October 6, 2015 at 12:45 pm

    I actually like how the twist went. Here are just the things I thought after reading:

    Realizing that the girl just somehow indirectly told her roommate, “You’re crying is creepy and horrible!” was a bit of a mood-breaker, even almost funny.

    I’m wondering how she didn’t realize she wasn’t touching the bed with her back and even when she turned to her side.

    Still, I appreciate shorts with twists that go like this.

  • Th3Fall3nAng3l5
    Commented on November 9, 2015 at 6:05 pm

    Oh yay! Another plagiarist! Write your own story or don’t post. You’re lucky I’m not going to report you.

  • Commented on February 21, 2016 at 5:45 pm

    Ehh.. That was just random.

  • Commented on April 20, 2016 at 4:24 pm

    Mind officially blown. Kinda reminds me of Ghostbusters, when the chick is levitating over the bed.

  • Commented on May 10, 2016 at 3:09 pm

    At least its original

  • Commented on January 8, 2017 at 10:03 pm

    i would advise being a little more descriptive. I would love to hear more of ur work! Love it! 🙂

  • Commented on February 17, 2017 at 1:22 pm

    Mindfuck to the MAX!

  • Commented on April 3, 2017 at 3:06 pm

    Loved it 10/10

  • kamrynanastasia
    Commented on April 25, 2017 at 5:04 pm

    I’ve heard a story similar to this. Maybe if you had changed the ending to something more believable. As a previous user had noted, there’s no way she wouldn’t have noticed that she wasn’t laying on the bed. It could have had maybe a spirit or maybe even blood covered walls (although cliché, it might have had more of an affect) Over all, it isn’t the worst story I’ve read.

  • Commented on May 5, 2017 at 1:37 pm

    Loved it but why didn’t she feel it lifting it her up and how did she see her getting lifted up if she was such a heavy sleeper?;)

  • Commented on May 18, 2017 at 2:58 pm

    I’m a wizard!!!!

  • Commented on July 10, 2017 at 7:55 pm

    Wow O-O i wasn’t expecting that. Great story. Gave me goosebumps.

  • Commented on January 13, 2018 at 9:32 am

    well actually Th3Fall3nAng3l5 he didn’t say that he made it, he just doesn’t know who did. BTW great story

    Commented on April 30, 2019 at 3:25 am

    wow that’s weird

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