There’s a reason I won’t go to Mockingbird Park,
Not just ‘cause it’s creepy, not just ‘cause it’s dark;
There are twisty twined trees, there are weeds and neglect,
But worse than all that is the “mocking” effect.
As you walk the park paths, you’ll hear a faint echo –
Footfalls – your own? – in that dim and grim ghetto,
Coming closer and closer as if someone’s there…
You whirl and see no one, just fog on the air.
So you whistle – it whistles. You cough – and it coughs.
Then from murky mists a gray shadow breaks off.
It’s your height and your size and your very same shape,
And then it’s upon you, no time to escape!
You suck in cold air, and then – poof – it moves through you.
You laugh at yourself – a shadow can’t chew you!
But you turn and see someone who’s walking away,
This person – your double! – you glimpse with dismay.
They continue their strolling on down the park trail,
While you melt into mist, a fog of gray veil.
And that’s why I won’t go back to Mockingbird Park –
I like being you.
I hope you like the dark.
27 Comments on 'Why I Won’t Go to Mockingbird Park'
Well, it rhymes…
Nice poem, but not really my cup of creepypasta
I actually passed this in the reviewing pasta’s. I enjoyed it a lot.
I also reviewed it and since I’m not much into poetry, I did enjoy this pasta. It was a good surprise.
Short and sweet with a nice atmosphere, just the way I like it! Well done.
I really enjoyed this. There was the twist in the end that fit perfectly into the story. Well done
i had to read it twice to understand it. [the i like being you part got me][/spoiler]
Ooh, this pasta reminds me of butter cream frosting. It’s smooth, sweet and tasty.
I remember reviewing this pasta, it was really good
This story is awesome, it’s a really unique creepypasta that reminds me of a Edgar Allen Poe. And he is known as one of the best horror writers of all time. And it makes you have to think about the story and read it a few more times. This story is just excellent.
It’s a good poem pasta that rhymes. It has a chilly atmosphere and it auctually left my thoughts to wander into darker areas… well done! 4/5
I reviewed this like 6 months ago. People, including me, like creepypoems.
Dang crap. This is skill. I thought it would be really lame and then I got a bit in and realized it was going somewhere and that twist ending got me good. I appreciate this poem.
It was excellent i liked it a lot the words were rhyming and it was meaningful poem
5/5
This Is a Great Story
Creepily-cute. I dig it. Compliments to the chef. Peace n stuff
I’m not shure if it’s because I’m stupid but I don’t get it
Very nice, short, and sweet.
The twist ending is awesome. The poem is well written and gives a glimpse of all the horror going on in mockingbird park. Leaves the rest up to the imagination.
This was really good. 5/5 from me. It was definatley long enough yet short enough to keep me interested the whole time. And I loved the ending. Great job!
Nice poem, plus it rhymes and is creepy, excellent!
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I liked it. The twist at the end
I seriously love this structure!! What an amazing creepypasta – so original and yet still really gets you at the end. Amazing work!! 🙂
Great pasta a mimicking pasta is very rare
it was nice i like it a lot keep it up
I love the poem format! Really well written but could be a lot scarier. 7/10